The Fairy Tale after the Fairy Tale

Once upon a time there was a fairy tale,
That ended in despair and loss,
and dreams that seemed to fail.
The maiden deceived, the knight released,
of services he'd failed at.
Left in sorrow, with no hint of tomorrow,
the young girl's hope's fell flat.
The knight moved on, fast as the setting sun,
and the girl was left alone.
Dwindled their communication, both fighting frustration,
and the girl continued on alone.
Time passed, winter passed.
Spring brought different hopes and dreams.
Forgetting word's said last, putting away the past,
New deep scares she cleans.
Enter Prince Charming, for whom she was longing,
yet she paced herself everyday.
Here, someone new she could talk to, yet she feared to.
For remembrance of last May.
Enter the knight, who'd lost another fight,
when he'd left our maiden, for another maiden.
With new words, seeking forgiveness for last May.
Enter the tears at 2a.m. and the acceptance of friendship at 1p.m.
So many things to catch up on,so many things to say.
What was lost was found, broken heart pieces picked off the ground.
And now we're here, the devil whispering in her ear,
saying she isn't good for our Prince.
With her heart let the knight mettle, on real love she shouldn't dottle.
In a way this works, no longer fireworks,
remembering rotten judgement, and many tissues spent.
She thinks about it,the flame that's been lit,
And woe is He! our dear sought Prince.
The maidens in love with him, this moment hence!

Author's Note

I know I'm not as good as most of you on here, but I do my best. If you finished it, I'd love to hear how it was.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

It was good! I think that you had story and brought that tale to life through your ink. That's the goal of any writer or poet. Are there things that might make it better, sure... but I've found it's better a poet measures their own ink by reading others and learning from those poets she enjoys.
I'm sure as you read more, and write more... your poetry shall shine. Keep up the good work!

Aaron =)

[TheDragonsCat]

Thanks, glad you thought so! I'm more of a story person, so having a good say on my poem means a lot!

[JordanIsaacSmith]

Great poem, really enjoyed reading this. I'm not a poet, so I don't know all the complexities of writing poetry and how your piece could be improved, but I really enjoyed reading it. Well done.