Getting over you.

A poem for my ex.

My life has never been the same,

Since the last time you said my name

It's not the same without you near.

And when I lay my head to rest

All I can do is try my best

To beat the everlasting test

Of getting over you, my dear.

 

If ever I could understand

Just what you want, I'd be the man

Who's loyal, loving, kind, and true.

But I just wish I could be there

To rub your feet and comb your hair

To lay with you and talk and share

A thousand memories, old and new.

 

As memories are whizzing by

I cannot help but wonder why

I ever was so mean to you.

If I could turn the great clock back

I would change the way I act

To keep this thing of ours intact

And that would be a wish come true

 

You always were my everything

You made me want to dance and sing

That I'm with you and you're with me.

I think about you, and when I do

I hope you think about me too

A happy thought of me and you

And how the way it used to be.

 

Now all I do is sit and try

To do my hardest not to cry

As I recall the times of past.

Though the hill is steeply sloping

In my head I am still coping

But in my heart I'm always hoping,

Wishing it would always last.

 

I want to tell you how I feel,

So that you'd know that it was real

And know you were my only pride.

Sometimes when I'm sitting here

I get this sinking feeling where

There's something missing that should be there

When I don't have you by my side.

 

But even though you're not with me

I hope that one day you'll agree

That we had something special here.

And even though I tried my best

I need to lay my head to rest

Don't think I'll ever beat the test

Of getting over you, my dear...

Author's Note

This is the first poem I've ever shared with anyone. I'd really appreciate any Comments or suggestions, constructive critisism what have you. Tell me what you think.

Reviews

Very emotional, regretful, with a tiny hint of bitterness. And longing.
One thing I do have to say is that not all poems have to rhyme. A lot of the lines seem a bit forced, and the wording was a little bit cliche. Maybe adding more detail would help this poem stand out more.

But otherwise, a good write.

[Rachel]

I totally agree with Phalen, the rhyming is a little too forced. But kudos to you for sharing your poem! I know it;s hard to put yourself out there, and you are a good writer! I'd love to read more of your stuff and watch you grow as a writer!

[shinybluestars03]

Great poem.
It has a great flow n rhythme.
I can feel your sadness for the lost of loved one.
And yes it does hurt to lose someone you love at least
you admit that you where wrong sometimes we take people for
granted all we can do is learn from the past.
Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

Best wishes

[LisetteCanWrite!]

To say this is a tribute is an understatement.. it was absolutely beautiful... and briiliantly portrayed. The message felt so from the heart... the flow trying to refrain from the bitterness of loss.. you don't want them to fell that ill part of your loss.. nor anger or resentment but small undertones exist.. which is human. The rhythm and rhyme were great.. I could truly feel this and have felt this before.. that sinking feeling like something or someone is missing. It is hard sometimes to get over that high passionate love.. especially if cut short for goals, through death in parting, rejection or it just ends on a high note for any reason (if we didn't end it ourselves).

The passion felt here.. is lost in sadness.. for this one.. as you end it still coping and trying to get over this loss.. I loved the honesty and emotions pouring forth... please keep writing.. this was fantastic! =)