Hands of a Thief

Time has stolen your beautiful smile, leaving the world with chaos and confusion
Your tears have filled the void left behind, happiness becoming a cruel illusion
The hand of fate appearing to be clean, ticking away as your pain grows stronger
But your smile is adored and dearly missed, without it days are growing longer

Time is a thief lurking around every corner, taking pleasure in your despair
Darkness has lived to crush the light of your beauty that's irresistible and rare
But I'll find your smile, bring it home, and keep it safe at whatever the cost
For as long as I'm here and prepared to fight, your smile is never alone or lost

Reviews

[Monatora]

I liked the comparisons, metaphors and symbolism in this poem! I loved how you portrayed time as a thief, it's a cool comparison and really connects with the audience! The rhymes were also a strong point. One thing to work on is the flow of the poem. But its a simple fix, by changing the phrasing or tense the flow can be improved. For example: Time has stolen your beautiful smile, it leaves the world with chaos and confusion, Your tears have filled the void left behind, Happiness a cruel illusion. The flow isn't a big problem though, I just thought it might help :) I think the idea of the poem has alot of merit, cleaning up a bit of the flow would just make it sound nicer :)
Overall good job!