five in the hole

The child told me to stay
Because family has always
Been a fantasy
The old lady told me to
To say F**k you
I like cats
The girl that likes
To dress up in diamonds
And pretend to be a movie star
Always looked for something better
And pointed him out to me
With her sharp eyes
The alcoholic
Just loved having a buddy
But knew that everything
Was
Full of acquaintance
And sex
And pushed me
To use it
Me?
I wanted to love
I wanted to live

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Poetry is another form of heart that displays whatever shinning up in life. So here you transmitting the real nicefeelings of yous iin words, very smoothly & thought provokingly.

Looking forward to reading you!

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, sharply beautiful poem...Melancholy and dark, yet a tinge of hope in the end...which is always the last thing in the pandora's box. Thank you for sharing.

[philip kobylarz]

sweet. i like cats too. to bad you live in costa mesa (?). i would like to sit at a cafe with this persona and flick matches at people walking by.

[Nothing Personal]

Apparently disjointed events connected in a mesh.. Poetry is about flow and is about substance..This one has ample of both..I was really impressed with your choice of lines..Last two lines my favorite..Good job..Impressed...

[Ed Hart]

how's it working out?

[Antonio Valentino]

Loved this Amber, great ending. Glad I got to read it tonight. Fantastic writing.

Antonio

[Dionysus Cain]

the phrases are on time, the movement of the words are real good. this is one of your best poems to me. the evolving process is difficult, yet with a fun that breathes insanity.

[Hedra Helix]

these newies are bad a*s beautiful Amber.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful... So deeply moving, in and out of lives and wandering places... Speaks of feelings, of striving desires for more. Seemed like just a glimpse of all there is... all there was...