What I need

What I need

A Poem by Katie Flores
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what can you spare

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I need some good news. what do you got? 
i'm hurting inside, screwed with all my pride.

I need comfort, what can you spare?
I'm weak now, have nothing left to hide.

I need faith, what can you instill?
I'm so broken now, silver tape won't comply.

I need love, what would you give?
I'm alone now, because they all lied.

I need clarity, what can you uncover?
I'm like the raging tide, but everything inside has dried.

I need myself, to fill this void,
because this is the one thing,
the only thing,
In which i alone can be employed.

© 2012 Katie Flores


Author's Note

Katie Flores
so uh... please review and i will return the favor :)
and the pattern is:
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(For the most part)

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we all need a shoulder to lean on at one point or another. I like how you pull it back to yourself being strong at the end.

Posted 12 Years Ago


wonderfully written...
give and take relations of life.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I've done a simmilar poem in both style and message. Well done :) on that 'less is more' note, try taking 'what' out of the second clause of every first line :p But great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on May 12, 2012
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Tags: pride, dried, raging tide

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Katie Flores
Katie Flores

I see pine, not palm trees, i see forest and dirt, not sand and beaches, CA



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i am starting to find myself. for the longest time i thought i could only be one thing, but im starting to realize... i can't. And well there's not much else to say... I am a pretty plain person, a.. more..

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