Ambition

Your dreams may sound funny and as if its a joke, almost impossible. But i think its how you go about your ambition, Not what it is.

There are going to be times when you learn more about the

world you’re entering and feel defeated when you see the

gap between the ideal and the reality… But that’s something

we’ll all face. The people that face those obstacles and

overcome them are people whose dreams come true.

Author's Note

Sorry i don't know what to call this type of writing so i just pute it as "poem" so if its a poem please let me know ^^

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

What a nice little nugget of insight and truth.. well done, sir.. Sometimes we do feel a little "defeated" when faced with "reality" but doesn't have to discourage.. Just makes you stronger and appreciate the little things more.. And that is the ONLY way your dreams will come true, is if you never give up and you fight for them.. nicely written:)

[Aethereal]

Poetic license allows you to call your expression anything that you please. Every expression stands on its own. Though we may dream, we may not like what we get once we get it
since life is full of dreadful glitches,
and detouring railway switches.
What will be must be.
Fate’s not ours to see,
but if we could,
we never would.

[Chillest]

i always love when people comment so i really i am thank full, but personality i don't believe in fate, i believe in paths, and we decide which path we take, i dont think anything is fate.

[Aethereal]

Fate's not ours to see,
what will be will be.
Paths are there to take
though they pass through fire,
and wind like a snake
to our fond desire.

[Brittney Lea]

you really are an amazing writer you make it easy to understand your point and i love that

[Chillest]

haha thanks, and your poems are better than mine ^^

[Glen Yumang Manese]

There are going to be times when you learn more about the

world you’re entering and feel defeated when you see the

gap between the ideal and the reality… But that’s something

we’ll all face. The people that face those obstacles and

overcome them are people whose dreams come true.

---

There are going to be times
When you learn more about the
World you’re entering
And feel defeated when you see the
Gap between the ideal and the reality…

...But that’s something we’ll all face.
The people that face those obstacles
And overcome them
Are people whose dreams come true.

---

I believe the structure of this would be better if you break it down...this is my IMPO and observation...you can do what you like...as for the message you are conveying in the poem...and this falls in category with poetry...its free verse and nothing wrong with that style...at times going with the restrictiveness and rhyme can take away from a verse and the thought you really want to put down on paper...but for the most part of this --- its a motivational write...you face ups and downs on the road of life...what you make of your dreams is up to you...no one --- but you can truly know that you can achieve...if you do and not just dream...but put forth the actions to get the dreams to become a reality...

[Chillest]

thanks for your criticism i really appreciate it, thank you for telling me its a free verse XD

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[Chillest]

Thank you so much ^^ im glad u enjoined it, i cant say how much i appreciate the criticism !!