Life

A poem about life, and death. A team effort by me and someone I know (okay it was mostly them)

Each and every breath

Minute

Hour

Day

Month

Year

Decade

You inch closer to your death

There's so much more then that

But there's also, so much less

Author's Note

Same rules as always. What's your opinions on this one? Also, do you like the idea of a team effort?

Reviews

[Leona Cieri]

Hmm.
It's nice, but I feel it could use more.
I liked the whole "time words" of minute, hour, etc, but the ending leaves me somewhat hanging, like it could go so much deeper. Perhaps because it's about life? I feel a few more lines and words here and there could significantly improve this poem so it's not so brief, as it leaves you wanting more.
Otherwise, it's a nice little poem. The last line seemed to automatically slow down with the first appearance of punctuation which I quite liked; it accentuated the meaning and line.
Nice job!