Day's Rebirth

GOD! How I love the start of day.

 

 

 

Just beneath the fog line
Greeting daybreak's kiss,
A deer and several rabbits
Are playing in the mist.

The morning dewdrops permeate
The summer meadow's earth.
Those dewdrops pass aromas
To the air at day's rebirth.

The sunrise is a work of art
From the master's brush
Blaze orange from his palette
And greens so very lush.

The mist that gently rises
Acts as morning’s cloak,
It softens day's first sunshine
As I sit beneath my oak.

The colors are so brilliant
With wildflower bouquet.
This greeting from the maker
Is the first gift of my day.

Reviews

[Deep in the Woodline...]

Easy flow, cohesive throughout, nice visuals. The half hour before daybreak through the half hour after are about my favorite time of day. I have written on it often and probably will again. No two mornings have ever been alike in some suble way or another. Good write here, Jerry.

[Doreen]

I love the first light of morning. Your words depict the feeling of it so well. What a marvelous read.

[Tina Kline]

What a beautiful nature poem, it creates such a wonderful vivid picture, love this and I like the flow and rhythm of this too. Fantastic job!

[Seriana]

Wow Jer, this is lovely! I LOVE nature poems, and this is just brilliant for the morning. What a colorful and sweet piece. I can almost imagine it now. Thanks for sharing!

[Angelic Darkness]

Love this poem...the innocence of a new day, like a fresh breath
of life we take.

[Sara Henry Heistand]

The first stanza came across particularly strong. "Just beneath the fog line" ... I can see that clearly. "[D]aybreak's kiss" has a deep aesthetic to it, especially tied into a morning haze; something like the meeting of atmospheres. "[P]laying in the mist" brings conviviality to this image, making it more lighthearted and less serious. This is a place the narrator loves inner child and out.

But, to be honest, I've never been a particular fan of simple verse. It usually sound a bit kitschy to me; something like Hallmark. I can appreciate the work that goes into it though. I know that I find it difficult to chop lines and add appropriate words where possible. It is work, it is skill, it is art.

The senses were kept alive through out the piece. I could taste the dew, feel the lush greens, see the mist, hear the peace, smell the flowers, and thrum with a heart heavy with love.

[Cavol Forbes]

After reading a few of your poems now I think what you're best at is rhythm. People struggle with that (me included) but you seem to do it kinda intuitively. As for content, this poem is cathartic and well put together. The kind of stuff that calms you down and reminds you to breathe.

[Zephyr]

the imagery in this piece is breathtaking. i feel like i'm watching the sunrise even as i write this.

this is gorgeous and completely mesmerizing. don't change a thing =)

[Zane Mathias]

very heart touching. i really like this one!!! great job ;)

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a beautiful poem to read at 4am. In just a short while your words will be coming to life here and I will remember reading this and smile.

The first stanza was especially magical -

"Just beneath the fog line,
Greeting daybreak's kiss,
A deer and several rabbits
Are playing in the mist."

Thank you for sharing this, it was really a good read.

take care :)