Darkness

Just a tiny poem that came to mind.

Fortunately, our eyes
Adjust to the darkness.
Sadly, so too do our souls.

Reviews

[V.B.]

This deserves better than Comic Sans. I saw the font, the three lines, and didn't expect much, I will admit. You surprised me though--rather pleasantly, I might add.

Though your display picture will likely haunt me in my sleep, I wanted to say that you managed to touch a nerve here, and with as few words as you used, that's a pretty remarkable thing. Well done.

[An Ordinary Woman]

oh oh, clever, sad, sweet, true.


you always get me right there. miss ur writing, friend.

[Markymark]

ahhh...where does conformity stop and identity begin? The quest for individuality leads seekers to a happy place where ~shock~ everyone is the same. Sadly, bright light causes a temporary painful experience, but after adjustment the colors are so much more brilliant.

Very short proverb here....and I like it.

Mark

[shythatway]

So very true.. but some souls seem stronger than others.. Maybe they've had more practice.

[Ferg]

I like it. your last line feels awkward when read aloud.
maybe remove "too" as "so" implies "also"??
otherwise, a powerful little piece with a big message

[Emily B]

wisdom comes in bright and shining moments just like this

[The Pack]

Tis clear that even our souls are like clay and suffer against the forces that ebb and flow around our lives. Well penned.

[Doreen]

This is so sad and so true. This is a tiny little blockbuster. It packs a powerful punch.