If I See You Every Day

 

If I see you every day forever

I will always recall that night.

I will recall how despite her best

Efforts, nature could not distract me from you.

~

Despite the sparkle of night lights

That the tiny waves threw at me,

My eyes could not leave the sparkle of yours.

My mind could not leave you.

~

Beneath the mournful beauty of the

Rhapsodies of the circling terns,

My ears could not release the rhythm

Of your soft breathing.

~

Shrouded in the cool comforting

Breeze that the lake blew upon us,

Your embrace was all I felt

Your hair was all I smelled.

~

You won that night.

Pitted against all the beauty that

Nature could bring to bear

At that time, in that place.

~

If I see you every day forever

I will always recall that night.

 

Reviews

[Ryan Gilroy]

Today is often called the first day of the rest of your life, i do recall it being scribed somewhere along the sands of time. I do enjoy your piece seeing it provides a brillant insightful crash course upon what happens when someone gets special close to them. It does bring the reader inside your shoes of what happens when two people can share a special moment together. I do see powerful imagery here which does do this poem some brillant justice and warrent all these comments whether helpful or unhelpful.

[Maria G.]

Lovely melancholy..

[Dillon Monroe]

Absolutely wonderful. This poem reminds me of how I feel about my girlfriend and I do hope the best for you and this woman. This poem flows so feel and creates a scene that is truely and simply amazing. Wonderful job. Amazing job. Love is something so powerful to write about and yet you can capture that joy in your poem and you do it well! Good, no great, no wonderful is the only way to describe this poem. Amazing.

[Sarah Williams]

*sigh* This was beautiful. I would certainly not complain if someone felt/wrote about me this way! ;o) Honestly, the feelings in this piece were honest and deep, they meant something. The imagery and the language that you used here were just icing on the cake of an already beautiful idea. Nice work!

[Maria Retz]

This is very beautiful.
I enjoyed reading it, It is stunning

You won that night.
Pitted against all the beauty that
Nature could bring to bear
At that time, in that place.

That's my favourite part in it, but really, I loved all of it. Five stars

[Barry S. Maltese]

Wow. That was fantastic. You put together a beautiful dedication of love that is filled with sights and smells. Written with great sensitivity and care. Very enjoyable!!

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a very passionate piece. I was blown away by the feelings this envoked in me. I would have sworn I could not even remember much about My first kiss. This is incredible, beautifully layed out and well written. Great job.
Debby Edwards

[Jesse F Hayes]

Wow. I'm really speechless. "If I see you every day forever/I will always recall that night." It's exactly how I feel about my first kiss. Incredible.

[D. R. Wilsey Jr.]

Simply beautiful and I love how you compare "her" beauty to nature.