If I See You Every Day

 

If I see you every day forever

I will always recall that night.

I will recall how despite her best

Efforts, nature could not distract me from you.

~

Despite the sparkle of night lights

That the tiny waves threw at me,

My eyes could not leave the sparkle of yours.

My mind could not leave you.

~

Beneath the mournful beauty of the

Rhapsodies of the circling terns,

My ears could not release the rhythm

Of your soft breathing.

~

Shrouded in the cool comforting

Breeze that the lake blew upon us,

Your embrace was all I felt

Your hair was all I smelled.

~

You won that night.

Pitted against all the beauty that

Nature could bring to bear

At that time, in that place.

~

If I see you every day forever

I will always recall that night.

 

Reviews

[Ryan Gilroy]

Today is often called the first day of the rest of your life, i do recall it being scribed somewhere along the sands of time. I do enjoy your piece seeing it provides a brillant insightful crash course upon what happens when someone gets special close to them. It does bring the reader inside your shoes of what happens when two people can share a special moment together. I do see powerful imagery here which does do this poem some brillant justice and warrent all these comments whether helpful or unhelpful.

[Doreen]

Oh wow this is gorgeous. I was just swept along. Such romance and beauty! I love the way this is written. Perfect. Just perfect.

[J]

okay. so it worked this time.

this is quite lovely, surprisingly sentimental and endearing. nice work. ;-)

[Seriana]

Awww, how wonderful! Just the way a memory of such a thing should be. So overpowering in it's impression, it is eternal. Lovely, simply lovely.

[holly]

Now THAT is a love poem! Yearning without sentimentality. Elegance within simplicity. Good writing!

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is very beautiful! and I agree that it is how a woman would want to be thought of. You have totally encapsulated romantic love here. I would say more if I weren't about to fall asleep. This is one of my favorites.

[Eve]

oh you softy you, every once in a while you throw us out a romantic tidbit to nibble on and to quench our poetic souls :)

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Oh, this is beautiful - nothing like making someone feel that special - single them out in such a way that there was no competition for them on any level - to take a time and place and freeze it in your memory and use it as a beginning as a turning point, as an anniversary date, as a time to be celebrated! How very very special this is.... and how great is this kind of moment, this kind of place and time - you expressed it so very clearly and sweetly. Kudos to you!

Kath

[Emily B]

If I see you every day forever. . . my new favorite quote from Jerry M.

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

wow that was beautiful...please explain how this has to do with sunsets...?