What? Lemme read this again....yup, Dani is right. Where did this soft, gentle soul emerge from? Ahhhh, what soothing words, what tender thoughts. The last line brings it all together. What'd I tell ya bout that love thang? Get's ya every time. Love is good. It's verra good, and you just expressed a wonderful, hidden desire for it. :)
I love this, in fact, I just saw the country awards, donno what the awards are called, but one thing that they touch upon is love, when asked what they write about, a universal theme, even in loneliness, there is such sentiment, great write! ----mishel
This is very touching and beautiful. It has such a soft, soothing and tender quaility to it...a beckoning, almost irresistable appeal for you to enter and answer this universal desire for intimacy and affection. It bears the honestly I think woman truly desire.
Jerry, I was so glad to see you write a piece that sounds very personal and wistful but still so you. It is wonderful
after reading the reviews of this piece It seems many people don't know about the heart of gold that lurks behind the swine facade. LOL. That seem strange as It was the heart behind the words that made me start reading your work. Hugs Debby
This is very nice in the words themselves but also it speaks to me as if you are ticking off the reasons why the being together just feels .... well, right. Let's take it sweet and slow and mostly importantly....together. Let's appreciate all the simple and lovely things right here and available for us together.....
What? Lemme read this again....yup, Dani is right. Where did this soft, gentle soul emerge from? Ahhhh, what soothing words, what tender thoughts. The last line brings it all together. What'd I tell ya bout that love thang? Get's ya every time. Love is good. It's verra good, and you just expressed a wonderful, hidden desire for it. :)
I might leave the commas out after walk with me and sit with me. I'm not sure you need them. The voice pauses naturally, I think. It's beautiful and lovely. It has a natural gentle cadence that draws the reader in. Nice work.
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