Hello?

Sigh.

Some days I think I've reached the point where life at last goes on.
I think I've come at last to truth and now accept you're gone.

But then I have a lousy day, a day that tries my hope.
That's when I remember, how your voice would help me cope.

On those days, I miss you so. I call to beg you home,
But I never have the nerve to speak, and just hang up the phone.

 

Author's Note

Just messin' around.

Reviews

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

I like this one. The rhyme scheme works well and it makes a statement that has the qualities of reality and real emotional content. It is also short but shall we say not so sweet. Not to common in this world of poets so full of themselves that they need stanza after stanza to repeat and reiterate the same old themes. If this is you just messing around I cannot wait to see what you accomplish when you put your entire mind to a project such as a poem. I myself, have written only a very few poems that have more that six or eight sentences, however I think that if a concept cannot be stated in a few well chosen words that it may not be worth stating at all. Keep up the good work my fellow poet and I shall keep an eye on your latest projects.
Peace&Love be with you...~M~

[ruth]

this is a great yet sad poem. i like the way you write.
-ruth

[Jillian]

Sad but beautiful. We all have someone that was dear to us that we have let go. No matter what the situation you miss that persons friendship. You capture that well here. I am amazed how much you can express in just a few lines, you are a gifted writer.

[emma]

Very sad, but well written.
This says so much in those few words, which isn't always easy to do.

[Seriana]

Well this is just sad. :( But I hear ya. Except I never actually call, I just open emails and sit there like I'm gonna send it, then decide I have nothing to say and accidentally send it anyway, and it's blank. Yeah, don't ask, LOL.
I don't know why you say poetry isn't your thing. I think you are quite good at it. :) So, now we're even!

[Anata]

nice flow, nice write .... but the subject snears to the heart...

How often do we not have to guts to come clean with our feelings, and just cut them off?

You portrayed nicely here how it feels when your heart takes the lead and your mind interrupts the flow...

Nice work!

[Kristina Moulaison]

That Neil Diamond song kills me everytime. This hurts too. Very poignant!

[just is]

Yes! I can feel this and been there a time or two,
Great little rant write.

[justjenn_2u]

I enjoyed this little rant. Absence makes it easier, but memories never fade. Thus, you always have reminders.

You used a short format where your point was made easily.

[TL Boehm]

sigh indeed. figured as long as I was tormenting you this morning with comments on your profile page and random blast messages - I should be proper and come review something. This is simply stated reality for so many. I can certainly relate - and probably will again.
Peace.