Deliverance

Just something that nature inspired the other day.

The stifling shroud that
hangs in the summer air
brings burden to even
the simplest of acts.

 

Breaths come with difficulty,
as if drawn through plastic wrap.
Suddenly, the skies darken
and bring nature's merciful fury.
 
The air cools and a breeze
rustles through the treetops,
turning leaves over, exposing
their pale underbellies.

 

This breeze, pregnant
with the scent of distant
lakes, holds the promise
of cool, wet relief.

 

Grape sized drops at first.
one, then another ... sploosh,
sploosh. Drops get smaller,
falling now in raging sheets.

 

The breeze, now a cool driving
wind, thrashes branches about
as the booming clap of Mother
Nature calls all to her relief.

 

I stand, arms outstretched
and head thrown back
in thanks as I am drenched
in her deliverance.

Reviews

[holly]

I feel so at home with this poem - like discussing the conditions of a summer afternoon with a long lost cousin - because your language is selected, not merely plopped down from of the flow of feelings, and you've obviously used a fine chisel to remove anything unnecessary to meaning. What an enjoyable piece!! Thank you for posting it.

[Sheila Kline]

Absolutely beautiful!! I can just feel the rain!
Congrats on your win in the RainyMood contest!!

[Mockingbird]

this also reminds me of a symbolic cleansing. great vivid imagery. i can almost hear the raindrops falling. great piece.

[Phibby Venable]

powerful and passionate! i love the images, esp the acceptance

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I can feel the powerful emotions in this write. So very heartfelt and tugging. Like this.

[Emily Rae]

refreshing read--literally

[ScaryTrees]

makes me want to stand out in a thunderstorm and damn the lightning
cleansing...
nicely written

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is my favorite part,
"Turning leaves over, exposing
Their pale underbellies.

This breeze, pregnant
With the scent of distant
Lakes, holds the promise..."

I also liked the words "merciful fury" together, for their unlikely, but true here, union. Makes you want to explore other times that negative words can be flipped. Excellent!

[DalainaRenee]

Very nice!

[Aven]

I loved this poem, such devotion to detail. Beautiful images, painted in words, colored with intent. Thanks for sharing!

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that was breath taking..This breeze, pregnant With the scent of distant Lakes - what a wonderful phrase..don't like to quote but that was amazing...thanks for posting..