On Moonlit Hill

Just so you know where I'll be.

 

On moonlit hill I contemplate

The whimsy of the lady, Fate.

 

In her wind I twist, I flail.

I flutter like an unbound sail.

 

On moonlit hill I sit with stars.

I plead they tell me where you are.

 

They do not speak, they do not tell.

They leave me to my mortal Hell.

 

On moonlit hill I sit alone

Awaiting love to lead me home.

 

I miss your look, I miss your touch.

I guess I loved you far too much.

 

On moonlit hill is where I'll be,

If ever you should pine for me

 

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Short but full of emotions twisting through the rhythm and rhyme of love left to fate.. and isn't love really that way for most. I love the fact this does not sound like a desperate call to just anyone.. it felt like it was written for someone really special you are waiting for. Really great word-weaving.. with a sad but romantic movement flowing through.. awesome!

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

this was much deeper than it appears on the surface I bet. Not to say you didn't give it enough thought either because to the contrary i mean the opposite in that I bet it means something more to you than we your readers can rightfully claim to under stand. I for one love it and give it a perfect score simply because it stirred my emotions.

Thank you so much. I'll be reading more of your work.

Dave

[Nick Erickson]

Wonderful piece. I'm not sure what else to say, but excellent and well written. I'm not a person who picks things apart, I just like it. It brought back to mind lost loves I've had.

[Angela Talbert]

This is simply beautiful. Brought tears to my eyes. I wish you'd write more poems my friend. Angie

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful sentiments expressed here - I hope that you find yourself with that special person again. Simple and elegant. Nicely done.
Light,
Siddartha

[Brianna Brie]

On moonlit hill is where I'll be,
If ever you should pine for me.

Exquisite...crowd pleaser! What a nice rhyme you have in this one. With the romance in the air you almost make lost love look appealing.

[Valentine]

Fate can cause a lot of heartache to all of us, so do not feel alone..Nice write,,God bless Valentine

[Alba T.]

I love the rhyme and flow of this piece.
Thanks for sharing it and reading it.
Once again I have to tell you I love the way you write.

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is very beautiful, mournful and whimsical at the same time. The rhyming is lovely and the sentiment is very affecting. I also love the picture you chose.

[TheNewerLisa]

This is sad, melancholy, and sweet all at the same time...I can see sitting up there on that hill myself, you rock!

[Phibby Venable]

this is so sad..and you didn't love too much..the lines have a great flow
and the sentiment is well said and contained. love is just plain difficult.
hugs to you.