--- Heaven's Treat ---

Oh those irresistable treats.

 

If you gazed upon a pastry,
that looked like Heaven's treat,
and you were very certain,
that pastry would be sweet.

If you raised this pastry
to your eager, lusting lips,
and took from it a single bite,
that made you feel quite sick,

would you taste this pastry,
upon the second sight?
Would you raise it to your lips,
and take another bite?

If you bit a second time,
and fell gravely ill again,
would you keep on tasting,
like you do with men?

Reviews

[Serendipity]

Okay, I agree. We are idiots how about that.

NO, we would not continue tasting the pastry; but men are different.

We can't help but fall for their sweet words; especially one who knows our weaknesses so well. They know what to say every single time. They know how to play us like a fool. And we fall for it every single time. We love them, that is our fault. We give them, and they take. And we allow them to take everything without asking for anything in return. Will we ever learn? I highly doubt it. That is why we are women.

Its not that we are stupid; we believe in the good in people, especially the good in the men we love. When the man we love tells us they love us, we believe it. We want to believe that they are true, because we are romantics at heart. Deep inside we hope this time it will taste better.

[Doreen]

The words you write are very deep and so very true. That last line just hits home.
But, I wonder, if we don't take the second bite, how will we ever find the one treat that is delicious and delightful.......hmmm.....but many belly-aches along the way....
This was quite good.
Strange.....have a sudden craving for strawberries!

[Babbette Francis]

oh, lol, are you sending someone a message? Pastries I'll pass up. Men? Well......... : p

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is S U P E R B ! and funny to boot.

[Emily B]

A biting question. . . well said.

[Bubo]

If you bit a second time,
And fell gravely ill again,
Would you keep on tasting?
Like you do with men.

Such a strong piece...........funly written but with a biting undertone......and yes, we seem to be suckers at times I know.........once bitten and twice shy etc...........I read this twice and thought well, i'm into the second bite now, and yes, feel ill.............very thought provoking and wonderfully written.

[Heart Of A Wolf]

haha. Cute and so very true. Why must we all do this stupid thing. They are nothing special. Only your mate is.

[Kara Hadley]

i lovelovelove this! the message here is amazing! flawlessly delivered. and so very true.

[Andrew Clark]

Is this poem for women or for men? Nice poem though.

[Narnie]

ouch! The sting in the tale(!). Loved it.