Final Test

 Here I lie at closing rest.
Unshaken faith at final test.
 
In velvet bed I lie in state.
I drift above, I watch and wait.
 
Loved ones weeping as they pass.
But will you come at long, long last?
 
They sign the book and pay respects
Say thier prayers and share regrets.
 
Daylight lingers on no more.
But there I wait, eyes on the door.
 
Oh heartless Fate, can she not see
How this sad end is searing me?
 
I only wanted one last kiss
Just to know that I'd be missed.
 
Fate, she sadly looks at me.
It's time to go ... Eternity!
 
In final test, my life sufficed
I have my place in "Paradise".
 
But "Paradise" without you love?
A final joke from God above?
 
With trumpet blast I pass the gates
As Heaven's Choir celebrates.
 
Angels sing and shower praise
Suddenly my spirits raise.
 
Over songs of joy sung loud.
A heartbeat's heard within crowd.
 
Dear God, has heard my every prayer
As I draw close I see you there.

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

Added a VoiceRead on 2/9/09

Reviews

[Sandra Cooper]

I have to agree with Katrina- Enjoyed the pictures this painted and how you wrote from the deceased's eyes- waiting for his long lost love...and I loved how they were reunited in Paradise- what we hope for, since facing the unknown and being there for eternity is too lonely a thought-
Well written Jerry,
Peace
San

[Ron]

Nice idea runs through this. Interesting and good to see some religious framed work.

[Lilly]

This is beautiful. I love the use of rhyme here - it creates a melody adding to the piece

[Shellie]

the flow is magnificent!!! its a lovely lovely angle to use and fabulously written!!!

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

i listened to the recording without reading the words, first.. and the music in the background added such a surreal touch! it made it all somehow fantastical, less forlorn seeming...

[Tony]

A funeral/novella.
Excellent.
And yes, I too enjoyed the images and emotions. It is fun to cry and then laugh and then pause in reflection.

[luciddreamer]

very nice write

[Doreen]

So sweet, romantic, sad, and joyous all at the same time. Very well written. You have a way with poetry.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Okay this is beautiful but it chills me.. loved the essence you convey of unshaken faith.. you have a huge, deep heart which clearly shows here! There is much sadness but also high morality that shines so divinely through this.. just wanting one last kiss.. reassurance you were loved and missed. Every person that leaves this place surely touches someone in some way.. and may not even know it.

Just regular faces that you get used to at a corner store or bank that you become accustomed to seeing daily for long periods.. LOOK forward to seeing can have great impact on many people! (It doesn't have to be a high paying job!) Yet we all wonder these things.. the essence of your faith is very touching.. all the way to the angels singing and seeing another that perhaps was waiting beyond heaven's gate.. this was such an emotional piece.. great job!

[Linda Stinson]

Ok, now that is one freaky pig picture there. I am not sure I should be here. Oh yea! a review, made me forget what I was doing. I think it is watching me!!! A final joke from God you say. Looks like it backfired. A match made for heaven is what I see. Sure looked like he was going on alone but he was the one lagging in the rears. And they soared happily ever after. You are a romantic.

[Phibby Venable]

oh, i love the thought of this being true..very romantic and fine!