In Your Orbit

Tinkering with words.

We forget that stars are but
distant suns, much like our own,
radiating light and lifegiving
warmth to all in their orbits.

Likewise, you are the sun that
brings light to my universe.
I breathe, I live, because
of your golden radiance.

The distant corners of my

elliptical orbit are too far
from you, my existential center.

Those corners are the winter

of my existence. I am in the

grasp of your gravity,
slipping closer with every orbit.
In time, I will tumble too close,

and I will burst into vapor.

Reviews

[Kristina Moulaison]

I want this to be way weirder with spacing than you would ever be comfortable with, because planets and everything. It's big. Anyway it's cool and should have an orbity title.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Thanks for stopping by for a read and thanks for the title suggestion. You'll have to fill me in on the weird spacing of which you speak.

[Kristina Moulaison]

Very good title!
I just wanted to feel more space in this, because of the theme I think. It was just a gut reaction. The words are very satisfying on their own.