Sap

Pretty self-explanatory.

What's her problem?
Does she not see how
very sweet you are?
Expelled, you cling to her,
refusing to let go.
Gravity pulls at you
but you are dense,
and will not be
easily torn from her.
But in the end,
you lie at ground,
at her feet, a sticky,
sheen of residue the
only remnant of you.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh yeh! it sucks to be sap :))) but it is the best way to cling to all that gnarly bark .. oh man .. i am such a one of those ... :} really fine expression ... picture perfect ... its a mirror i don't want to look into ... i hope you are Ok Creepy :)

E.

[icelandicblue]

Fabulous metaphor and the picture only added to the angst of your words. There are times that no matter how much we want something it is not to be and we are left with the residue of emotional puddles.

[Kristina Moulaison]

:) This is clever. An apt and fitting metaphor in double entendre. Poor faithful sap! I really like this!

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is the same as the tiger thing in effectiveness. You could have just said, I am all of these things, but because we can feel the denseness, the unrelenting stickiness of sap...can visualize the residue at her feet it is so much more powerful.

[KeelyJane]

I like the analogy you use in this piece of such an all to familiar circumstance. Great imagery too. Nice work :)