Solitude

 

Looking across the dreary expanse

That was the bleak morning sky

Brought to mind thoughts of you.

~

In that vast skyscape filled with

The gray clouds that signaled gloom,

There was a break, a brief break.

~

A break in the gloom that liberated

Your brilliant light to blaze upon

My soul like nothing before or since.

~

Even as the glow warmed through to

My soul, thawed my once frigid heart, I knew

That the break would be painfully short.

~

My joy was tempered by the sight of the

Dreary clouds slowly engulfing the light. In

What seemed like a moment, the light was gone.

~

Now as I look across the sky, I see no more

Breaks in this gloom, it goes to the end of

The horizon, as far as the heart can see,

There is Solitude.

Reviews

[Doreen]

That last stanza really did it for me. This was a gut wrenching, beautiful, honest write. I really enjoyed reading this.

[Tai Chi Italy]

God I know the feelings in this great poem well CBG, sorry you feel that way too. Tai, just discovering your work

[Kristina Moulaison]

Mmmm...this is written well and captures the mood you speak of perfectly, doing what good poetry is meant to do, tell the naked truth.

[Elizabeth]

The combination of words is wonderful. For anyone who has ever felt alone, this poem is companionship.

[Laura Sparkle]

It left me speechless for a moment. It's a beautiful piece and the sadness in the lines is a very nice touch. well done..

[Narnie]

I feel a ramble coming on...

The sky is a magnificent thing. So many people can relate it to their feelings of loneliness, of happiness, of wonder. Isn't it strange that when we want it to, the sky can be a great comfort. We can tell ourselves that there's the same moon shining as the one that will shine on the people we love, no matter how far away they are... or we can tell ourselves that the clouds make us feel claustrophic and desperate for clear blue to allow us to experience the freedom that comes with sunny days. We hate the sky when there is unbroken cloud and we love it when there are just a few whispy clouds that allow our imagination to fly.

You have captured one of those emotions here so beautifully. Eloquent does not even begin to describe it. It is moody and very masculine but also very tender in the message it conveys. I took a long time to think about my review and then I just thought f*** it... just write down my thoughts. That's what poetry should do to a person's mind in my opinion.

Perfect.

[Michael Parks]

Very powerful, it made me experience the often short time in which love first finds us, and the seeming flash of time we get to enjoy it in its most brilliant form.... and the slow withdraw of the wonder as love responds to the failed demands of two people, receding, leaving us alone once more. Very soulful, very good use of imagery to move us. Well done.

[Scot Savage]

Solitude is a double-edge sword. Weld it carefully!

[Sarah Williams]

Isn't this always the way things happen...the darkness surrounds us and suddenly there is a light in the midst of that darkness. We feel a joy so unbelievable and yet we know that it is short lived. This poem was beautifully written...the imagery was perfect for getting across the emotion and inspiration of this piece. Breathtaking!

[Dj Golden]

It almost has that feel of a gray day where it is drizzling slightly, but not hard enough to be rain. It is a very emotional piece that wrenches at the heart. I especially liked the last line which really ties the whole scene together. Well written and a good work. Good Job.