June 7, 2012 10:38p.m

old

I want to succumb to these emotions

i want to give in to you

problem is

you're not asking anything of me.

Reviews

[PurpleQuartz]

I think for only a few words you got a nice emotion in there.
Keep writing.

[Sarah G.]

Well, this is a nice attempt at a short poem. It would look better if you increase the text size. Will bee easier to read. :)

[Sarah G.]

Could you please read and rate my poem, 'The Lonesome Dark'? Thanks. :)