it's a moving story, heartbreakingly so. for me, as a reader, it felt like the story that was dripping in a palpable feeling of loss and grief. i could visualize the narrator's nightmarish existence with "him" - he who had no heart or soul, he who had, without care or concern, floundered precious moments and memories, in the callous, criminal pursuit of his ghosts. the narrator's dark perils of having to hide and protect her soul, shield from his evil gaze the "things" too precious to be called things, and even in that, the narrator's utter lack of belief in being able to have done so successfully. heartbreaking visions.
the tragic scene of her mother's passing away, a ghastly end to what obviously was a rather dark life, is haunting.
the narrator's feverish search for the one last remnant of her mother - the picture - her "final gaze" - something to hold on to, something to bring some semblance of finality, something to preserve for posterity the memory of the dark night that never ended in those eyes - it's a search that seems, from the very outset, a lost cause - but one that cannot be called off because too much is at stake, too much left to find. the last line is the final blow, the intensity of which no amount of preparedness can really protect her (or the reader from).
it's a dark, dark tale.
ps: i did have to read it aloud like a story, for the stanzas flowed into each other, at awkward junctures, fragmenting the verse erratically.
Poem is very good. The story was sad and and a strong story. We pay for thing done in memory too. Even the simple silver locket become precious. A excellent poem.
Coyote
it's a moving story, heartbreakingly so. for me, as a reader, it felt like the story that was dripping in a palpable feeling of loss and grief. i could visualize the narrator's nightmarish existence with "him" - he who had no heart or soul, he who had, without care or concern, floundered precious moments and memories, in the callous, criminal pursuit of his ghosts. the narrator's dark perils of having to hide and protect her soul, shield from his evil gaze the "things" too precious to be called things, and even in that, the narrator's utter lack of belief in being able to have done so successfully. heartbreaking visions.
the tragic scene of her mother's passing away, a ghastly end to what obviously was a rather dark life, is haunting.
the narrator's feverish search for the one last remnant of her mother - the picture - her "final gaze" - something to hold on to, something to bring some semblance of finality, something to preserve for posterity the memory of the dark night that never ended in those eyes - it's a search that seems, from the very outset, a lost cause - but one that cannot be called off because too much is at stake, too much left to find. the last line is the final blow, the intensity of which no amount of preparedness can really protect her (or the reader from).
it's a dark, dark tale.
ps: i did have to read it aloud like a story, for the stanzas flowed into each other, at awkward junctures, fragmenting the verse erratically.
Terry Collett has been writing since 1971 and published on and off since 1972. He has written poems, plays, and short stories. He is married with eight children and eight grandchildren. on January 27t.. more..