S.F.M

This is happening to me ;) :( Honestly, I am not just saying this but I don't think I did really good on this one, I feel like I could have pushed harder but I didn't anyhow I hope you guys enjoyed it

S.F.M

Sadness is all I feel,

Failure is all I give,

Madness is all I show,

Will it ever go,

Me, you, and sadness at the table,

I walk into school with my head raised high,

Next moment I know I’m looking at the floor .

Wondering why am I still here,

Sadness is all I feel,

I am getting beat up,

Broken,

Hurt,

Everyday,

Has anyone done anything?,

Not one person,

I wonder if It matters,

I’m I so Pathetic that they don't care about me.

Am I so much of a loser they don’t care about me,

Am I not perfect are my curls in my hair wrong,

Sadness failure Madness I give it to you everyday and show it as much as I can

and what do you do about it everyone everyone everyone

stares and laugh at me while I walk through the halls with my head down low

wondering why I'm still here on this campus yes....

Should I quit now or should I try to wait

I think I should quit

I’m sorry I was such a failure,

Author's Note

Honestly, I am not just saying this but I don't think I did really good on this one, I feel like I could have pushed harder but I didn't anyhow I hope you guys enjoyed it :)

Have a great day :) God bless

- LUNA

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm sorry if this is how you feel even some of the time. It's not a good way to feel & I wish I could give you some encouragement. This is a well-written description & your self-honesty is what makes your writing so strong. I hope that you can stop measuring yourself, as if you have to reach some level of intensity when writing. We all write in different levels of intensity, different moods. However it comes out is just the way you were feeling when you wrote this. I could write the same thing ten different ways on ten different days. I guess what I'm saying is, don't put yourself under a microscope. Nobody looks pretty when under a magnifying glass. Take a few steps back & see the total picture that is YOU. Someday you'll see it like we all do (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[richieb]

Theresa,
I cannot understand your low self esteem. You are a fine writer, published a book. You are a dancer, a talent most of us do not have. Do not be apologetic, you are a beautiful young woman. Most important of all, you are a princess. Your heavenly Father created you in His Image. You are an heir to His Heavenly Kingdom.
Peace ad Joy,
Richie b.

[Teresa]

Thank You So Much. :) Much love.

[Erudite]

You're valuable. You're a beautiful person. There's nothing you've done wrong. It's the bullies that are wrong.

And if they are such horrible people that they would push you to the fence and leave you feeling broken, then you shouldn't care about their opinion.

When no one else loves you, it's your job to love yourself. Talk to yourself the way that you would talk to a best friend.

[Teresa]

aw thank you for those sweet words :)) I really love reading it :)
God Bless
-Teresa K aka Luna

[Davidgeo]

Self confidence, real self confidence dispels bullies and allows you to write anything you want without having to qualify it with "I feel like I could have pushed harder....".

(I get drunk on Mondays during football season... I wouldn't listen to me)

[Teresa]

Aww thank you for kind words Hun :)

Email me

[Davidgeo]

My cat handles that stuff. You're gonna have to talk to him. He's got herpes... also, he's an unregistered sex offender.

[Teresa]

OKay :) Heee-heee

[Perdition]

Well...poetry is a form of art, and as such it is at its best when if bears forth an honesty and the reader feels it. It is and expression from the heart without pretense. I think it has to have a value as well for the reader and that value is sometimes emotion and sometimes esthetics but mostly a voice that is unique and that reaches out and touches the reader. I don't believe this fails as a poem on that level...you have a unique voice and it will continue to improve so long as you continue to write, so keep writing and never apologize for your art. Let the reader decide the value and then for yourself remember: no poet ever satisfied with their poetry completely. Walt Whitman on his death bed was still editing his book of poems "Leaves of Grass" and he spent a lifetime editing that thing. Publishing and re-publishing until he passed away leaving us with the final version known as the "deathbed edition"....but we found the value in all of them and he released the poem from the rhyme for us establishing the "free verse" so I have to suggest and say, "Keep writing and believe, be patient and I think you will continue to have a distinctive voice and if nothing else..an outlet you enjoy so well done Luna and thank you for sharing this!

[Teresa]

Thank you for your kind words, I dont have any words back : ) Just thank you, and God Bless You : )

Much love to you,
Teresa AKA LUNA

[Perdition]

Well, You have the poetry and I accept Twizzlers as well so all is good, Thanks for the blessings. Looking forward to reading more.

[Broken Soul]

For me, writing is not something to be treated like work, or graded. No need to "push harder," my friend. This piece is perfect the way it is. Well done.

[Teresa]

Aw, ha Thank You :) your writing is great...and once again thank you for those kind words : ))
read moreAw, ha Thank You :) your writing is great...and once again thank you for those kind words : ))

- Teresa aka Luna

[Luissanto]

I think that the way you express yourself when you write is amazing. Your honesty and your realness are very refreshing. These are qualities that make great writers.

I felt the sadness and the pain
come to life in every line that I read.
That is an amazing gift not everyone can do that.There is nothing pathetic
about hurting or feeling broken. We've all felt that way but there will come a time of healing, and I sincerely believe that your words are going to help others heal as well.

When people read your words, they are going to understand that they are not alone and that others have felt this way also.

The thing about going through is that there is another side. Please do not forget this. You are truly a gifted writer and a very special person. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing such a special gift.

[Teresa]

AW :) Thank you that means a lot ... and i'm speechless to what you said about my work..Um thank you is all i could say and I love that you have a connection :)

-Teresa aka Luna

GOD BLESS

[ohiojohn]

Edgar Allan Poe wrote once:

"Nothing cheers or comforts me, all I have are dark forbodings. My life seems a waste. But I will struggle on and hope for the hope".

Lucky he kept on. One of the most brilliant writers in World history. This aside, a very tender loving man to his family. They are glad he decided to go on.

God bless.

[Teresa]

:))) Thanks :)))

Hope you liked :)
-God bless

-Teresa Aka Luna