Mum

A tribute to a mother

God sent an angel,
And I called her Mum,
From a hapless babe, to man I’ve become,
She’s stood by me, and held me strong.

With a firm rap she set me right,
And her warm caress, my days were bright,
She lifts me up, whenever I fall
She’s always there, at my beck and call.

Sleepless nights and silent tears,
She prays for me and all my fears,
And even though, I hurt her hard,
She’s only love, an angelic guard.

And I pray to God, and thank him right,
For having his angel, to make my life bright.

Author's Note

Kindly review and critique

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

I found this poem by using WC's new discover feature, which is an awesome tool! I like this heartfelt poem, but I have a suggestion about the rhyme scheme. Your first stanza is an ABBC rhyme, and the rest of the poem is rhyming couplets. The last stanza uses a rhyme that you used previously in the poem, right/bright. You may want to try, in the future, using the rhyme scheme ABCB or ABAB for the first few stanzas, and then finish the poem with a rhyming couplet as the last stanza. Your heart is in the right place, and that's the most important thing.

[Terence Sheque]

I'm a novice and appreciate your inputs. I will definitely work on my writings. Thanks so much for the feedback.
Can I be a bit selfish and if possible May I request you to give me feedback on my other poems too.

Thanks once again.

Cheers!

[GreenShoes]

I'd be happy to! :)

[R.M.C]

I like this. I can feel your love and appreciation for your mother and I can relate as I too love my mother and appreciate her greatly. I would suggest going over it again tho and reworking parts to make them flow better which will give the piece a better rhythm that added to the rhymes will make it a great read.

[Terence Sheque]

Thank you. Appreciate your inputs. Will definitely work on it.