Velvet

His lifeline cut off at the source
A first fence faller three mile course
A jedi knight without the force
He missed her velvet touch

A tarnished gemstone does not shine
The bitter taste of tonic wine
A banquet where the vultures dine
He missed her velvet touch

A power plant run low on gas
A chandelier of broken glass
She took away his back stage pass
He missed her velvet touch

A heart that's lost it's rhythmic beat
He walks another dead end street
A raging fire still brings no heat
He missed her velvet touch

They exorcised love's haunting ghost
She said the words he cherished most
They raised a glass she made the toast
He felt her velvet touch

Reviews

[Kerra]

Oh WOW!!! I really love that last stanza, this is amazing...

[Tepo]

Thanks Kerra
Truly appreciate such a kind review

[barleygirl]

Your signature rhyming riff which I love, well done as usual! What stands out for me is how this narrator is missing her velvet touch, but most of the imagery used to represent their time together is NOT velvety at all, but rather, expressed in fiery dynamic intense terms. Nicely imaginative scenarios you paint in brief phrasing to show what has passed between these two. Love the "happy ending" that satisfies all this longing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

thank you Margie
Very kind review

[Chris Shaw]

A tale with a happy ending. The repetition works well here. Really nice flow and end rhyme to the stanzas. Good job done.

Chris

[Tepo]

thank you very much Chris

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome.:)