Goddess

she hovers over hallowed grounds
Creates the most delightful sounds
Runs with the fox hunts with the hounds
The goddess of the night

A heart as cold as arctic ice
Thaws every time she takes a slice
Her virtue doubles as her vice
The goddess of the night

The power to bring giants to their knees
Unlocking hearts with master keys
A hug disguised her fatal squeeze
The goddess of the night

A juggernaut of wit and charm
When reapers took her by the arm
Was they who wound up at the farm
The goddess of the night

She's out there now still standing tall
With scissors for your paper wall
Deciding when you're due a call
The goddess of the night

Reviews

[Helen]

I love the mystical power of this poem and the goddess theme. I also love it's musicality - while reading it, the UB40 song "the pillow" kept coming into my head, specifically the line "pale beauty in a crimson bed".

I am definitely no expert, but in my head, your poem follows a similar rhythm, until the last line in each of your verses which actually contrast strongly with the UB40 song in meaning and in tempo (and in number of syllables). "The goddess of the night" is strong and sure of her enduring place in the world, whereas in the UB40 song the pale beauty "takes a blade and breaks her skin" and the final line is "she'll have no more tomorrows". This tragic contrast added to my enjoyment of your poem, which feels like the writer is in awe of the feminine energy of the goddess.

[Tepo]

Thanks Helen
To be compared to ub40 is a massive compliment
I admire all they stood for
A bunch of guys in thatcher's Britain when 3 million plus were on the dole
I'm sure you know ub 40 was the card for signing on they were all issued with
Unemployment benefit 40
Cheers again
Made my day

[Helen]

Yay! Glad to have made your day. I like UB40 too and stood in the signing on line in my time!

[Space Queen]

Wonderful rhythm and rhymes. I'd say she's a nightmare dressed like day dream. She sounds powerful. I love it.

[Tepo]

thanks Queenie
Powerful was the aim so job done
Extremely grateful for your time
read morethanks Queenie
Powerful was the aim so job done
Extremely grateful for your time
Ta much

[danielle.]

Hello Tepo

Thank you for your reviews.

I enjoyed this poem & the mythical theme. She sounds beautiful yet terrifying.

I’m not sure if you want critique on how it reads but the one line that threw me was the first of the third stanza... it has 10 syllables and all the others 8.

Elle x

[Tepo]

Thank you Elle
Aye
I know what you mean
I'm kinda into her but wouldn't want to take her an open pay packet.

Ta for the education
I have been asked before if I count syllables when writing
I don't, but will look out for such mistakes in future
I wrote this when on holiday in Los gigantes tenerife.
And wanted to get the giants ( cliffs ) in somehow.
Maybe got a bit carried away.
Thanks again
I learned something from your visit and appreciate it

[barleygirl]

I've seen you use this rhyme scheme before & I'm kinda falling in love with it. I want to try it. I love how your Goddess could be a relentless romantic slayer . . . or could be one's own insecurities which hound romance right out of one's life . . . or could be the unpredictable crevasse of fate sucking us in just when we thought we saw optimistic baubles on the horizon (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

Get right in about it Margie
I'd bet you come up with a better
Thanks very much for for such a review
Greatly appreciated

[poetgurl]

Goodness! This is quite a write, like the rhyme scheme and the flow,
Love your last stanza

[Tepo]

Thank you ang
Truly appreciate your support
Much obliged