Ice

A songbird flapping lost it's tune
Anarchic tides ignore the moon
Tries cooking up without a spoon
His solid tears of ice

A mountain top without a peak
A linguist struggling to speak
Sad eyes have sprung a constant leak
His solid tears of ice

The winds of change remain the same
He'll find someone to take the blame
An architect his house of shame
His solid tears of ice

A broken unforgiving heart
A horse lagging behind the cart
Another race lost at the start
His solid tears of ice

Her touch brought Warmth to frozen skin
A tonic mixed with bitter gin
She resurrects his toothless grin
She melts his tears of ice

Reviews

[DarkPoet]

Interesting Tepo, I love the rhyming schemes

[Tepo]

Thank you soulseyi
Very much appreciate the read and comment
Ta

[barleygirl]

Great construction -- snappy rhyme & rhythm, meaningful & effective repetition (last line for 4 verses) . . . but most of all, your poem is one of the best examples of SHOW instead of tell. You pick butt-kicking examples/details that deliver the meaning of your message by painting a variety of symbolic situations. We all need that touch of warmth to thaw our frozen hearts after such a deadly winter (400,000 covid deaths in the USA just today!) *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

Thank you Margie
I often think your review outdoes the write
Extremely grateful for such encouraging words
Ta much

[barleygirl]

Thanks for the kudos!

[poetgurl]

This is so well written, love the rhyming scheme as well

[Tepo]

Thank you ang
Very encouraging
Ta

[Just Kim]

A broken unforgiving heart
A horse lagging behind the cart
Another race lost at the start
His solid tears of ice

Oh I really like this part, This is such a moving piece! I can feel this write

[Tepo]

Thanks kim
Glad you liked it
Appreciate you taking time to read
And leaving such a review
Much obliged

[Chris Shaw]

Enjoyed very much the rhyme scheme here Tepo and the repetition in the fourth line of each stanza. Heart warming final stanza. Warmth does indeed melt ice.

Chris

[Tepo]

Thank you very much chris
Apparently there is something in this that shouldn't be
Site moderators have barred my account
At least I got on long enough to thank you
Much appreciated

[Chris Shaw]

It's a glitch Tepo. I have been advised numerous times over the last weeks that my account has been banned. It usually happens when work is being done on the site. Ignore it my friend and keep posting :)

[Tepo]

Thank you chris