Friday the thirteenth

In the dark deep of night
Hear the growl, feel the bite
Of the creatures I had locked away
They were gone, they came back
As they sense that I lack
The conviction to keep them at bay
Trouble is all I see
Is a shadow or three
Dance around at the edge of my eye
Some are quick, others slow
Like they want me to know
This is what you become when you die
Could it just be the date
Freddy feeding me bait
As he strives to get into my dreams
Cuts and slashes his way
Through my night into day
While ignoring my terrified screams
As the thirteenth now ends
Thoughts turn back to the friends
Who were with me when this all went down
I will pray they survived
The night Kreuger untied
Ran amok as he claimed back his crown

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Freddy still lives on Elm Street I believe...
But Jason drowned when he was just a little boy didn't he?
Oh his mother was something...
and Michael with that mask...no babysitters are ever safe.
Lots came back with this one.
Now having said all of that, I see the allegory here...those spooky, scary moments in our lives when
things go amok...when we have so many fears linked with family, love, jobs...the covid.
But if we can survive, we can stave off Freddy for another time.
and find some peace.
j.

[Tepo]

Think you left out wee Damian
Thanks for reminder of some horror characters.
Truly appreciate your time and review

[Chris Shaw]

I never saw the film. I am so out of sync with the whole covid thingy that I can:t remember what day of the week it is, yet alone the date. Quite pleased about that especially where Friday 13th is being played out. I felt the buildup of tension here in the prevailing darkness. A feeling of what:s coming next. A spooky write, well written too and flowed well. Enjoyed the read Tepo, but I kept the light on.

Chris

[Tepo]

Thank you very much chris
For shining a light on this
Much appreciated

[barleygirl]

I missed Friday the 13th a week ago, but your poem gives me a chance to revisit the concept. I never saw Friday the 13th expressed like a spooky Halloween poem, but I love where you took this & your execution is well-done. I love your opening -- a push-and-pull fight to keep the demons away & culminating in this superb line: "I lack the conviction to keep them at bay" . . . I love a narrator who is portrayed as being ambivalent about the horrors all around . . . can't tell if he/she loves the horror or hates it! Nicely developed tension -- your storyline is compelling becuz of how the tension builds from top to bottom (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

Hi Margie
I'm slap bang in the middle of arranging my dad's funeral
Have not been reading lately
I look forward to catching up with your work in the very near future
Your kind words and hug could not have come at a better time
Very much appreciated

[barleygirl]

Sorry for your loss (((HUGS)))