Crying

She brightens up the darkest room
Was blessed before she left the womb
Stood at the altar with her groom
The girl who cries alone

She touches other people's lives
Disarms them of their guns and knives
Sends husbands running to their wives
The girl who cries alone

Her heart beats to the sweetest tune
Ask for her help receive the moon
And nothing looks like changing soon
The girl who cries alone

She breezes through her busy day
An optimist who finds the way
Not worried there's a price to pay
The girl who cries alone

She has the wings she needs to fly
Though clipped them for that special guy
One day she'll know the reason why
The girl who's tears I dry

Reviews

[Marina]

Wonderful rhyme and rhythm, Tepo, with a lovely narrative as well. Those self sacrificing souls are pure heaven on Earth. They will do all for others even at the expense of themselves. Your poem reads with a smooth flow and that repetition end line maintains its impact with a nice twist on it at the poem's conclusion. Well written. 💛

[Tepo]

Thanks very much Marina
Extremely grateful for the time you took to review this.
And the very kind words

[barleygirl]

You paint a vivid character portrait here using strong fresh unexpected details. There are many people in this world who go along quietly doing good works & pushing away the loneliness they may feel. I like how the last verse changes the perspective & ends your story with a twist (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

Thank you very much Margie
Still trying to find my way around the site
Lately it's all stuff I can't read
Great to come back to such a kind review
Much appreciated
Stevie

[Chris Shaw]

Very well penned Tepo. Your poem flows well and I admired the rhyme scheme you used. There are some who will give there all, put others before themselves and you have described one such selfless person here. Nice work.

Chris

[Tepo]

Thank you very much Chris
Extremely grateful for your support

[Wild Rose]

I hope she has got her man
One who will let her have her way
To fly a little each day

No need to fly alone

[Tepo]

No need to fly alone at all
Thanks Rose
Very much appreciated

[Gee]

Describes very well a good friends wife(her third marriage) who totally underestimate her self worth and how much she is loved.
The title will be me if Man City win this afternoon.
You write really well sir

[Tepo]

Thanks very much sir
And good luck to Liverpool
I'm watching my lot now 2_0 up after 30 mins
Appreciate the read

[Gee]

I married into the blue half. Met my wife, Dalry girl, in Tenerife in 1991. She moved South in 1993.
A pleasure to read you

[Tepo]

Dalry girl?
as in Dalry Scotland?
Nice to see you Gee

[Gee]

Aye, Dalry Ayrshire.
Good to meet you too

[Michelle Barnard]

Absolutely brilliant!! Love this one!

[Tepo]

Thank you Michelle
Appreciate the read and comment very much

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A nicely crafted piece with a sad thread describing someone selfless who seems to have no confidence or self belief. Nice rhyming and interesting ending.

[Tepo]

I think you summed her up better than I did John.
Thank you for the read and review
Very much appreciated