Crows and coffin nails

Crows and coffin nails

A Poem by Ted

The crows in my head often seek
a good psychotherapist
They often b***h about the weather
The earth too high
The sky too low
And the rain and heavy snowfall is killing them

the crows passing by the window don't really
take pleasure in reading my poems
they say "bitching" is not really poetic
We have seen your father
He had carried his coffin a while
But now he dropped it in the ground
From time to time he flies with us

© 2013 Ted


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Dark, humorous, intriguing. Very well written poem, I really liked it. Thank you for sharing it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely done. It reminded me of a friend who has a story that really fitted with the poem. I like the symbolism that is also tied into the poem. To me the crow creates is like memories of the past and the troubled emotions that come with those memories. Then the subconscious being another crow that tries to relieve us of the bad experience in a calming way.

Posted 11 Years Ago


A fair bit of wit but a fair bit of mourning as well...a good reflection of the mix of emotions a crow is capable of evoking...nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ted

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I am happy you feel it.
I love the use of language in this! It made me laugh while also retaining a semblance of seriousness. Very witty, dynamic and honest. Good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this. Humorous but slightly melancholy in its darkness.
Thanks

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written Ted. I thank you for posting.
Leo

Posted 11 Years Ago


dark but beautiful. well penned.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lovely stuff, very dark, but beautiful writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ted

11 Years Ago

Thank you Luke. This is a poetry I wrote one years ago after the death of my father, so I guess it .. read more
Luke L

11 Years Ago

you're welcome man
Fascinating metaphor, great dark yet witty imagery in this poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very thought provoking piece Ted. I just wish the crows here would stop leaving their footprints.. I enjoyed thank you for the rr shallimarRose

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ted
Ted

Sibiu, Sibiu, Romania



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