Tiny House

   As time goes by I find it increasingly difficult to talk with people, especially young people. I don’t understand them… what motivates them or worse yet what will set them off.  A case in point… my wife sent me to the store to get butter and English muffins for Sunday breakfast. As I entered the parking lot something at the opposite end caught my eye.

Parked in the back corner was a tiny house. You know the one… it was a little over twenty feet long and about ten foot wide.    Covered head to toe in a rich, dark brown siding its windows were wrapped with a pure white trim that made them glisten. Its pitched roof was coated with a bright green metal and white trim giving this miniature building a gorgeous and inviting appearance.

   I deliberately park close by so I could take a closer look.  Not surprisingly, sitting on its back porch, a young man of 23 or so,  with his feet dangling over the edge was enjoying a smoke. It was one of those vapor things that released copious clouds of white smoke when he exhaled.

   I wanted to say something… anything that convince him of my desire to look inside so I approached him after he expelled the next in a made storm of billowing white clouds.

   “Hi,” I began moving closer once I had his attention. “I like your fort.”

   The young man suddenly jumped to his feet.

   “Screw you old man,” he snorted before slamming the door leaving me standing alone in the parking lot bewildered.

   My wife might be right… maybe it’s best if I don’t talk to people. 

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This story made me smile! You can write a short story and be so descripted and keep your readers attention!
Love this!

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read... greatly appreciated !!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

You are so welcome!

[olla]

I love this story.. in all it's perfect imperfections.. I chuckle when my daughter looks at me and say.. oh mom.. that is such generational thinking.. I just look back and tell her she is "right arm and farm out"

[Zoya]

Haha, I can imagine the look on your face when that happened! It sure could be difficult for y'all to understand the younger generation. Trust me, sometimes I don't get them myself...lol.
Nice work!

[Will Neill]

I was brought up to respect those older when I was a boy. Alas that has now been eroded today. He could have said, 'hey pops its not a fort do you want to take a look inside'-his loss Tegon.

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read Will... what's a mother to do ? He just took 'fort' the wrong way.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

I must getting too old to understand the young as well, how rude of him!

[Tegon Maus]

To be fair... I did call his house a fort. I was trying to be funny and it backfired !

[Tobias H. Reese]

:-) I tend to notice that your humor and unique craft is lost on a lot of readers. You are one of my favorite writers on this site...I've returned to hunt for potential scripts; you have so many great pieces to choose from (!)

[Tegon Maus]

Thank you for saying so Tobias... very kind of you. What are you looking for?

[Tobias H. Reese]

I'm presently looking for a sci-fi mystery/drama
Two or three characters I could play myself, a female, locations industrial, wooded area/nature.
"pg" . Think Tarkovsky meets John Carpenter. :-)
If that's even possible.
I have a production team (small group of artist associates: composers, voice actors, cinematographers etc. and have been working on a few script ideas myself but....and but....and...well...And but you know. Need something fresh. I'll keep searching. Between producing, filming, etc. I'd rather focus on tweaking a script rather than beginning from scratch. I have a lot of pages here, there of undeveloped ideas. Dealing with a bit 'o writers block perhaps. Thank yoU!!

[Tegon Maus]

I know what you mean... take a look at my story Count William. Not John Carpenter... but

[Tobias H. Reese]

Count William is brilliant. (I actually wanted to film this a few years ago...stillllll haven't managed to do it though. Re-reading through your work. Peace. Hope you are well.

[Len Jeffrey]

For a short story it is quite pleasant and entirely interesting throughout.

[Wez Hardyn]

It was the young man's loss - it seems unlikely that you would have learnt anything from him but just think of what he could have learnt from you. As I grow older I make a point of speaking with strangers at every opportunity and most of the time it goes well and only rarely goes bad. In my experience it's not a generation, gender or class thing - it's just people.

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read Wez! I agree ! Hateful b******s aren't they? It's my fault for being a smart a*s... maybe 'fort' wasn't the right word !