Three seconds

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        In the beginning, when I was young, I had control over it, I was the master and it was at my command.  I was certain of it.  Now as time has gone by, I have fallen victim to its seductive lure more often than I care to admit.  It has become clear my control was an illusion and I am now at its whim.  I've tried to fight it, to control it, to hide how badly I need it and I confess...  I fear time is running out.  Everyone will know,  I am a time traveler. 

I can jump into the future at will.  Sometimes it's only a few minutes, sometimes it's as much as three hours but I assure you, I have the ability, the power to do so any time I wish.

It is a lonely responsibility to move through time but I am one of the lucky ones, I have a companion... Auggie.  To all outward appearances he is merely an over grown cat but believe me when I say he is in full belief he is a dog.

When he is not patrolling the fence line, he is faithfully at my side waiting for the opportunity of our next jump.  As you might expect the method is quite complex and the electronic equipment involved is beyond the understanding of an ordinary mind.  The choice of the right frequency is paramount to an early departure and ultimately the success of the jump.  Once chosen, usually a cooking ­channel, I take my place... reclining to allow Auggie access to my chest... it's the most comfortable position for him to stand guard over me and then, in what seems like a mere 3 seconds to me I am transported to the future.

"Nice nap?" my wife asks and I smile wryly comfortable in the knowledge I have successfully jumped once more and she is none the wiser... I am a time traveler and I have come from the past to help.

 

 

Reviews

[Sesame]

Hello Tegon,

Thanks for entering the competition. Alas not a winner this time. I do not have the time to provide a detailed critique on all the submissions, but a few remarks:

- the 'control' is never lost is it? By starting this way you make it seem that control will be lost, but it isn't.
- first sentence you keep repeating control, using other words (master, command) but it adds nothing new
- the role of Auggie is not exactly clear
- in my opinion the end is a bit of a cliché

But it was a nice read all in all. Keep it up!

Regards,

Sesame

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[Angi]

Ha! I think that time travelers are not as rare as you say. For I am one, too! Ha! This had me grinning, Tegon. Angi~

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is awesome! I wish I was a time traveler. "The Time traveler's wife" really propelled my fascination for this type of fantasy. Well penned, Tegon!

[Will Neill]

I just read this wonderful little story, I too am a time traveler, mysterously it only happen's as soon as my wife begins to talk to me. Nice one.
Will

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read Will. Send me something you would like to share and I will return the favor

[Will Neill]

Take your pick-they are all there,any time you feel like it.
Will

[Steve Boseley]

Loved it!! Kept me reading to the end, with the payoff really well delivered.

[Tegon Maus]

Hi Steve... thanks for the read. Please send something you would like to share.

[Steve Boseley]

I am almost finishing my first submission here: "Road to Nowhere". Needs another rewrite but give it a look if you get a chance

[Tegon Maus]

I'll give it a read... by the way I like your picture

[Violet Batt]

This story is pretty cool, I like it.

[Tegon Maus]

Hi Violet... thank you for the read. Please send something you would like to share.

[Violet Batt]

If you like vampires, you can read my first book, Appsalootly Batty, if you would like.

[Tegon Maus]

I'll give it a read... if you like Vampires try my story Count William

[Pheonix Sojourn]

good work! I enjoy the way it is written, where it is almost like a song (to me any ways)

[Tegon Maus]

Pheonix... thank you. That’s a very kind description... I try to make my writing flow with a certain rhythm but I never thought about it in terms of a song. Thank you again.

[Pheonix Sojourn]

I am a musician/writer and many other things so when I see something that has a rhythm, I can think of it as a song! Your welcome

[Spoon]

This is just amazing. It is witty and incredibly clever, and although it's a story I detect a satisfying amount of lyrical language, a soothing rhythm. I think this lends a great deal of effect to the amusing qualities.
This is a quietly warming story, and doesn't need to be in your face to make you smile.

One of the best things I have read on this site. Congratulations, you made me smile.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

You are always good for a chuckle, Tegon! I'm a time traveler, too, but I travel back into the past. No overgrown cat on my chest, but I do have a dog, Mister - who thinks he is part cat - under the foot of my recliner. My time travel is happening with much more frequency, and I am a bit worried, I may soon be lost in the past.

[Craig2591]

I suspected what you were talking about and it still made me laugh when I got to the end. The addition of Auggie makes the story even better. Very well told.

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read Craig. Please send something you would like to share

[Craig2591]

I think you might enjoy this one... http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/abcblair/1138502/

[Samuel Dickens]

I didn't expect quite so satiable an ending. In fact, it made me smile, fellow napper/time-traveler that I am.

[Tegon Maus]

Thanks for the read. Please send something you would like to share and I will return the favor.