Background

My 2nd attempt at a Tetractys poem!

It’s
funny
what you see
when you look past
the person on the face book picture and
really pay attention to the background
you realize
so much more
going
on

Author's Note

It's supposed to be:
line 1 - 1 syllable
line 2 - 2 syllables
line 3 - 3 syllables
line 4 - 4 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables

And then I've reversed that. Can you proof read it, make sure it's correct? Thanxx in advance for all the corrections and reviews!!

THANXX FOR ALL THE INPUT!! I corrected the syllable count. Thanx =^-^=

Reviews

[Mioki]

It seems like you have all the syllables correct, and I don't see any grammer or spelling mistakes.

On the piece's content, it really interest me. It's something most people don't even think about. Nowadays people have online friends, but sometimes they are only two dimensional to them. We let these people become the picture they post for the world to see, and that leaves us forgetting the fact that they're human also.

Your piece brings attention to the issue of how humans see each other. I really do appreciate this piece, thank you for sharing your work.

[Toney Vega]

Really interesting form, never seen it before. Definately dig the subject matter and it certainly makes you think towards the end. Kudos.

[Ima]

i havent tried this poetic scheme so i dont think i will be of any help =( but it was a worthy read =)
i really liked it =)

[RunsWithCats]

I thought it was very interesting...great job on capturing the true things in life that we as living beings must grasp. ^_^ Very good. ~God Bless

[RTB]

hahaha wat a funny thing to write about honestly its crazy good form how its so original haha good job :)

[emily joe]

LOVE this.

[Randolf Ramos]

To be able to see what is going on in every detail requires lot of brain and creativity. In this sense, i foresee that you are very good in painting as well, as the poem conveys. You really is a well gifted individual. Keep it up, by the way, I like the style and the form, it is soothing to the eyes. great! two thumbs up.

[Taylor H.]

Loved this. Very simple. and the syllables are correct

[Lydia Jamison]

That's so true... but really, it's that way with any picture (Let it be known that I detest Facebook and prefer to use Twitter)

[M. Elizabeth.]

Awesome, Really interesting form of writing,
I love it :) I might try somthing like this now
good job !
and thanks for your reviews :)

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very interesting form and the subject is thought provoking..