Background

My 2nd attempt at a Tetractys poem!

It’s
funny
what you see
when you look past
the person on the face book picture and
really pay attention to the background
you realize
so much more
going
on

Author's Note

It's supposed to be:
line 1 - 1 syllable
line 2 - 2 syllables
line 3 - 3 syllables
line 4 - 4 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables

And then I've reversed that. Can you proof read it, make sure it's correct? Thanxx in advance for all the corrections and reviews!!

THANXX FOR ALL THE INPUT!! I corrected the syllable count. Thanx =^-^=

Reviews

[Mioki]

It seems like you have all the syllables correct, and I don't see any grammer or spelling mistakes.

On the piece's content, it really interest me. It's something most people don't even think about. Nowadays people have online friends, but sometimes they are only two dimensional to them. We let these people become the picture they post for the world to see, and that leaves us forgetting the fact that they're human also.

Your piece brings attention to the issue of how humans see each other. I really do appreciate this piece, thank you for sharing your work.

[Anicca]

I love the form of this poem, very individual, I dont think I have come across it before. Not only did it read well, it also looks good on paper!
Very interesting poem that could be interpreted in two ways. Either:
-behind the picture is a landscape, more people etc all with their own story
or
-there is so much more to the person in the picture then meets the eye, there are things going on in their life that nobody else knows about but if you examine the picture carefully these things become obvious
Maybe its neither, maybe its both!
It got me thinking anyway :)
Thanks for sharing!

[Neisha Ann]

100% agreed. I really like this poem.

[Needy]

I really agree with you on this :)

[Star Wolf]

So true! So true! There is more to see than what you're currently looking at. Nice job, I like this.

[Emily Quinn]

how true it is! In a society where communications are built majorily on computers and text messages, and where more and more people are begining to judge by profiles (facebook) instead of taking the time to find out more in the flesh. People often have tunnel vision and don't even notice the "so much more
going on."

[Jade-UH]

It's great, I like it. And so true. ^_^

[Tina Kline]

Great job on this and the poem's message is one that is so true everywhere in our world. We don't look past the image to see who is really there.

[Flo]

interesting way of writing it, and also understandable, most poems i read that depend on the syllables usually keep being a bit shady, good job!!!

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

really thought this was cool i cant really ryme stuff or write poems like this so i have alot of respect for people who are good at this kind of poetry u are one of thos e people