Born Here

Shadowed stairs
Empty stares
Fires burning
Stomach turning
Devil looming
Voices booming
Abuse received
Smile deceived
I'm numb
Can't run
From born
Til worn
Every day
I pay
Saveless baby
Grown maybe
God ignored
Devil scored
My fate
My state
Tortured soul
No goal
Dying day
Turning gray
Bury me
Hurry please

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love the form of this TBL. It cascades into the darkness, tumbling over sharp and jagged rocks all the way as you intertwine such rapid fire word play!

[Teddybearlee]

Thank you, it was an exciting form to complete, thats for sure, it's hard to try and not have a "weak link", I assume all writers are like..eh..that just doesn't fit or work, this one, overall, I was proud of for being different and not having a line where I felt it was forced.

[Angel]

Wow. Just wow. This is really good, I mean sad but good in forms of writing. I love how you did no more than 2 words per line that's creative. Could totally relate keep on writing! :)

[Teddybearlee]

Thank you Angel, I really appreciate your review, all I can do is pour my heart out in writing anymore, most of my writing is the same boring style that gets no attention, but this one just can't of came out the way it did fortunately. Wanted to see if I could keep it short yet to the point and honest and convey what I was saying because I am always so "wordy" (go figure :) )

[Angel]

That's all anyone can really do. And honestly, when I write I do it for me others seeing it is just a bonus. It was really good so I say you did it :)