The beast

The beast

A Poem by Abyss
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Emotional

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It scratches and claws trying to escape but it only leaves scars of disappointment, Its screams are screams of pain and causes my skin to cry tears of red. It is an unleashed fury, It is an uncontrollable sorrow, It is untamed anger and pain. It is the beast inside, And it has control

© 2017 Abyss


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Love it! However, if you want to improve I suggest working more on implicit vs. explicit writing (showing rather than telling). Instead of stating explicitly "It is untamed anger and pain," convey that through your description of the beast/scene.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abyss

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the advice!!!
Alexzandera

7 Years Ago

Anytime :)

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Added on September 15, 2017
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Abyss
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