Alone

Please don't leave me here alone.
I need you to come and cover me with your love.
I know I have done wrong,
but I need you to tell me that it will be ok and to move on.
I can't take sitting her all alone,
because then no one is there to wipe my tears.
I shed them for you, for the love that we share.

Alone I will be then till you can finally realize,
that you are all alone with no one to hold,
no one to love,
and no one to be there when you cry.
 

Reviews

[Mike Espinosa]

This is a cool poem. You showed your emotions very well. I have a few suggestions though, mostly grammatical.

I like that you didn't tr to make it one sentence per line, but your commas seem misplaced or superfluous, and some places seem to be missing proper commas. This doesn't take away from the power of the poem, but it makes it look a little neater.

Also, not every line needs to end with a comma or period, you can have a line end with no punctuation. It's an easy fix. I normally do poetry by seeing how the stanzas would look as a sentence or paragraph, and use that to determine where my punctuation goes.

Your breaks are really good though. They don't feel awkward or misplaced. Good job on this poem. Keep writing, you have talent.