Between Rusty Pages

Between Rusty Pages

A Poem by Tazeen Ahmed

 

 

Behold these melodramatic verses like sweat on sweeties,

Confide forever in feathery ink.

Reveal crimson roses flattered between dusty wings,

Tenderly will it swallow composed tits and bits.

And blustery squalls shall smile in wilderness…

© 2017 Tazeen Ahmed


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Just a drink of words to intake. Beautiful nd super.. I just fall for the wording.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Amazing use of words and thoughts. I enjoyed this poem. Thank you Tazeen for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


What a delicious piece! I ate up all your words and underlying meanings. Love to discover pieces that aren't exactly as they are at the surface. Keep sharing

Posted 6 Years Ago


Short, simple and spot on!

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is such a beautiful write, almost lilting to the ears. I very much enjoyed the flow. One thing though: 'tits and bits' doesn't feel right to me (I would have suggested 'titbits', which is actually the correct term, but it doesn't fit well with the rhythm of this piece) maybe you should try to alter that part a bit ;)
A lovely read for me. Well penned, Tazeen :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

Dr. Yumna, thank you so much for an insightful and constructive review. I did struggle a little with.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Wow! This is so exquisitely beautiful! I love the way the syllables of your writing just flow so well... and the way your words just fit together like puzzle pieces. You are such an amazing poetress.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.
Extravagant beads of words.
I guess sweat on sweeties implies your efforts and the sweet results coming out of it.
White light has seven hidden colors, same as your writing.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

Woah! that gives me a wide smile :)
I appreciate readers relating and understanding their ow.. read more
I liked how imaginative you were writing about the pages.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

Thank you Saher! :)
Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
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CMC
I like the use of near-rhymes in this poem a lot. Good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

thank you Chris. I really appreciate it!
CMC

6 Years Ago

You are quite welcome.
Such a beguiling piece Tazeen......

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tazeen Ahmed

6 Years Ago

Thanks Haneefah:)

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Added on December 7, 2017
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