EUPHORIC FANTASY

 

Meditating in a stream of lusty warmth

Frost moistens the hues of translucent mirror

Scribbled ink signals etched on watery windows

A crippled brain wondering solo and choruses fluttering

Hooked on the indefinite plot whilst rainbow shades penetrate

Drizzling rain slakes the craving for rejuvenation

Triggering time ticks; entwining in wicked tricks

Blurred, black days evaporate thru fire embracing dullness

Like a mystic fairy, a flibbertigibbet soars and sails up high

 

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is welcome.

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

You have a very dreamy imagination and a great ability to put it in words.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Great words.
Thank you kindly.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[writ rajat]

very nice poem dear amazing presentation

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you rajat. I really appreciate it!

[Re-Pete]

this is lovely. so much depth and meaning packed in. strong imagery. great pic. all magical.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you! You're greatly appreciated.

[Paul Bell]

The picture is brill.
Feels like the Nymphs day out.
Some Alice in wonderland too.
Where did you pluck flibbertigibbet from. That's got to be my word of the day.
I like inside your head.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Honestly, I never read or watched those fairytales, yet I'm aware:p.
I'm glad you liked it :)
Thank you!

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - best not get too high.
I loved the opening lines 'lusty warmth' - sounds like a jacuzzi pool party.
well done Tazeen.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I agree with you, Tony. Lol.
Thank you for reviewing. I really appreciate it :)

[M P Ramesh]

tazeen,
Certain words are inside the writer only and can not be visible to the reader however he/she tries. It is not the issue with diction and syntax. But the words while giving birth to meaning leave behind the shadow permanently and deliberately where they got expunged, with or without the knowledge and permission of the writer.

the reflections are such as above.

excellent attempt indeed...


carry on.........


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[Tazeen Ahmed]

I very well get your point. A reader is free to make out anything of it. Phrases might have a "pun".
Thank you kindly for reading and reviewing so thoughtfully.

[Rogerh]

Very visual poem. It made me feel like I was there

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you sir Roger. I really appreciate it!

[Sami Khalil]

This reminds me of the visit I paid of Hot Springs Arkansas. Hot streams and hot baths deck the place. It was marvelous as your poem.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

That must have been a very pleasant experience, I suppose.
Thank you so much:)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome.