EPITOME OF DEATH

Death is a bloody stream, penetrating valleys

Meandering with numerous forms, it betrays

Originating from intent causes, it sallies

It is a trap which cannot be escaped

 

The bickering warns the last glimpse

It curves and flows, tempered with tackling

Destined with injuries, it reconciles

A squeak follows silence of tears trickling

 

It commences its concealed voyage

As it slips and slithers; peeps and peeks

Fate forever flourishes fame in camouflage

As it flows with longing reminiscences

 

 

 

Reviews

[Joey Nizz]

This was really good to read!
You are very creative with your words, the lines were just incredible!

Well done.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you Joey!::))

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[Najam Us Saher]

I loved the comparison of death with stream. Use of alliteration is upto the mark and you have created a beautiful imagery of a stream with comparison to death.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Yes, you're right. In a way, a stream has no connection with death but I tried to put it that way. I really appreciate it ::))

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah you have done that very well. Keep it up. It is my pleasure. ☺

[Inda]

I really like this one. the rhythm is effective and there is focus throughout. good job!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much! ::)))

[Sofia]

Woah! I loved it. Choice of words is so excellent. Keep writing dear. You've got a wonderful talent :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it :)

[Sofia]

You're welcome :)