Criticism

the journey from criticism to ...

criticism reasoned anger

anger  ruptured into tears

emotions lashed the soul

silence prevailed far and wide

solemn, still, stormed

regret shattered the pain

a voice whispered through the winds

drastically overcoming whims

lessons were learnt

for the future to clean

the litters of past

 

 

Reviews

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Keep it up!!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you Emily! :)

[Manu]

Very nicely written poem, Tazeen :-)
Journey from criticism to learning...You have beautifully presented this thought through your poetry! Very strong and powerful writing.
Keep it up Tazeen!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you Gorthi for visiting and presenting your powerful review :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

"A voice whispered through winds,
drastically overcoming whims," this line took me away. A place we've all been. Well penned!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much!
I'm glad that you liked it! :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're very welcome!

[AYVID N]

Every storm brings calm in its wake. Every outburst brings regrets with lessons along the way. Like rainbows after harsh rains. You said it beautifully here Tazeen. Appreciated so much.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much !
I really appreciate it ^_^

[AYVID N]

You are welcome Tazeen

[Alfred Kukitz]

It would seem to be you are ahead of your time.

When I was 15 I was thinking of how to avoid the Vietnam war.

Regards,
Al

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Oh, thank you !
It means a lot to me ^_^

[iamshadowine]

criticism amazingly portrayed here in the poem!
keep writing :D

[Tazeen Ahmed]

thank you for your encouraging words!
:)

[matrixmark]

Wow, really powerful words used in this wonderful piece. The last three lines were very well executed indeed.

Really nice piece.

Mark.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you!
It means a lot :)

[Kaylee]

As mentioned by your other readers you selected powerful words. It gave this poem and oomph and emphasized the overall feeling of it. I also loved the ending verse "A voice whispered through winds drastically overcoming whims lessons were learnt for the future to clean the litter of past."

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you! Your comment matters a lot to me!! :)

[barleygirl]

The best part of this poem is the way you have chosen dynamic verbs (ruptured, lashed, stormed) that SHOW the power & movement of the feelings you are describing here. I also like the way you are describing a journey in the briefest of terms . . . not providing any connective tissue, but relying on the reader to fill in the blanks.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Your analysis is so perfect!
It made me smile :)
Thank you for reading...

[Meshalini]

A well written poem..

Amazing....keep it up..

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you for your sweet words, Mehshalini!!

[Meshalini]

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