Criticism

the journey from criticism to ...

criticism reasoned anger

anger  ruptured into tears

emotions lashed the soul

silence prevailed far and wide

solemn, still, stormed

regret shattered the pain

a voice whispered through the winds

drastically overcoming whims

lessons were learnt

for the future to clean

the litters of past

 

 

Reviews

[The Last Philospher]

Loved it! It was simple and straightforward, that's the type of poetry I love most.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reading:)

[Richard🖌]

Tazeen,
You seem to be wiser than your age, certainly skilled at expressing and powerfully descriptive word usage.
Reasoned, ruptured, lashed, stormed, shattered, etc; all create an atmospheric ambiance that not only commands attention, but attracts the mind into your moment in such a way that the reader becomes more deeply involved … excellent technique. Then, you left just the right amount up to the reader to fill in the blanks with their own understandings and needs.
A fine lesson you've blessed us with, too, of how to weather the storms and come out of them on top.
Think of "rupted" in comparison to "erupted" for which may express more power and flow … just an thought shared.

I love it, Tazeen … you've a very fine potential!
Keep your pen shined, full, and ready … big thank you hug! ⁓ Richard : )

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you! You've accurately analysed the true spirit of it. I'm blessed and encouraged. It made my day!

[Richard🖌]

Lady Tazeen,
You have truly humbled and blessed me. ✨

[writ rajat]

extreemely adorable poem as well as tiny

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Adorable in what sense?
It's tiny but its meaningful. It's about the time you're criticized and soon you recover to find a change within.
Thank you so much!

[Joey Nizz]

Well written!
Capturing the true meaning for criticism
Well done.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you!

[Joey Nizz]

your welcome :)

[apennylate]

A very clearly written stream of being, coupled with nice transitions and wordplay... Very nicely penned...

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you very much:)

[apennylate]

You are very welcome

[Isabella Ivy]

I enjoyed this! (Especially the style of the beginning. I wish it would have continued that way! So smart!) I.I.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much!!

[Isabella Ivy]

You're most welcome! I.I.

[Sonakshi Arora]

A poem with a very deep meaning and very relatable as well. I love it. :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

thank you!

[Dolce Vita]

I had to read this a couple of times before I 'got it' and then I really did! It perfectly describes our first response to criticism and then the results afterward.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you!
I'm glad you 'got it'!
You are appreciated :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is a powerful piece! And so realistic too! I think as long as it's constructive criticism it's good! Something other than that is downright destructive..
I liked reading this! Good work! ☺

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I completely agree to that !
Sometimes it may prove to be destructive and painful but constructive ones always prove helpful :)
Thank you so much for your review!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Indeed! You are welcome! Always a pleasure ☺

[The dark story]

A very strong piece with an important and powerful message. A journey well depicted with all its stops and phases.
Though I was pondering over some structures. Like, I felt it should be "ruptured into tears" as that makes more sense. And "the winds" and "the litterS". Well that's minor and doesn't disrupt the flow.
Well written. Thanks for sharing.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you Atiba for the constructive review !!
I will surely overcome the tiny mistakes
read moreThank you Atiba for the constructive review !!
I will surely overcome the tiny mistakes
Well, I appreciate it! :::::)))))

[The dark story]

It's a pleasure :)