Tazeen,
You seem to be wiser than your age, certainly skilled at expressing and powerfully descriptive word usage.
Reasoned, ruptured, lashed, stormed, shattered, etc; all create an atmospheric ambiance that not only commands attention, but attracts the mind into your moment in such a way that the reader becomes more deeply involved … excellent technique. Then, you left just the right amount up to the reader to fill in the blanks with their own understandings and needs.
A fine lesson you've blessed us with, too, of how to weather the storms and come out of them on top.
Think of "rupted" in comparison to "erupted" for which may express more power and flow … just an thought shared.
I love it, Tazeen … you've a very fine potential!
Keep your pen shined, full, and ready … big thank you hug! ⁓ Richard : )
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you! You've accurately analysed the true spirit of it. I'm blessed and encouraged. It made my .. read moreThank you! You've accurately analysed the true spirit of it. I'm blessed and encouraged. It made my day!
7 Years Ago
Lady Tazeen,
You have truly humbled and blessed me. ✨
Adorable in what sense?
It's tiny but its meaningful. It's about the time you're criticized a.. read moreAdorable in what sense?
It's tiny but its meaningful. It's about the time you're criticized and soon you recover to find a change within.
Thank you so much!
I had to read this a couple of times before I 'got it' and then I really did! It perfectly describes our first response to criticism and then the results afterward.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you!
I'm glad you 'got it'!
You are appreciated :)
This is a powerful piece! And so realistic too! I think as long as it's constructive criticism it's good! Something other than that is downright destructive..
I liked reading this! Good work! ☺
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I completely agree to that !
Sometimes it may prove to be destructive and painful but constru.. read moreI completely agree to that !
Sometimes it may prove to be destructive and painful but constructive ones always prove helpful :)
Thank you so much for your review!!
A very strong piece with an important and powerful message. A journey well depicted with all its stops and phases.
Though I was pondering over some structures. Like, I felt it should be "ruptured into tears" as that makes more sense. And "the winds" and "the litterS". Well that's minor and doesn't disrupt the flow.
Well written. Thanks for sharing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you Atiba for the constructive review !!
I will surely overcome the tiny mistakes read moreThank you Atiba for the constructive review !!
I will surely overcome the tiny mistakes
Well, I appreciate it! :::::)))))