We Are Thy Generation

A Poem by Tazeen Ahmed

attributes of human nature...

dreams , we chase

desires ,we pursue

promises, we fulfill

intentions, we muster

memories, we retain

impacts ,we regret

attitude, we flaunt

talents , we restrain

skills, we perform

duties, we obligate

rules, we ought to follow

pain , we Inflict

character, we hold unique

attempts, we make

inspiration , we acquire

weaknesses, we retreat

ambitions, we pursue

sacrifice, we execute

intellect , we play games

our strength, assists our fate

our spirit, keeps us resolved

our heart, lures love

our senses, discover perfection

our soul, bows generously

our eyes, trifle with sensibility

our behavior, defines persona

© 2016 Tazeen Ahmed

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Coyote Poetry

I liked the flow of thoughts leading to proper ending. You are right. We decide our life and our journey. We must seek our dreams with great drive and energy. When hope and dreams are dead. So are we. Thank you Tazeen for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much!

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.

iamshadowine

I love the way you've created this poem. We desire, believe, attempt, we fail, we fall, our ambitions, our inspirations and what not, everything has been described here!
"dreams , we chase"
"attempts, we make"
"promises, we fulfill"
I loved these phrases! :)

keep writing :D

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

Thank you Shadowine!
I'm glad you admired it!!

barleygirl

This is an unusual collection of life observations. A repetitive list like this could be cut in half to be more interesting & compelling. After the halfway point, we know where you're going & you're not presenting anything new.

Another way to improve: use more interesting & dynamic verbs . . . "intentions we connote" could be "intentions we muster" (the verb "connote" is flat & boring ). Also: "pain we deal" could be "pain we inflict" (see how it's more dynamic & conveys intensity?) Or: "ambitions we sustain" could be "ambitions we pursue" (there's more action in this verb). A long list of flat verbs that don't draw a picture in the reader's mind will become boring.