One to Ten

One to Ten

A Poem by Taz
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My life from one to ten.

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One~ How old I was when I became doomed.

Two~I can not remember anything.

Three~Happy year.

Four~Still believed in joy.

Five~I was loved and I loved.

Six~My last breath of a true smile.

Seven~Everything changed, I was different from other kids.

Eight~School was bad, home was worse.

Nine~I wanted to die.

Ten~My first attempt. 

© 2017 Taz


Author's Note

Taz
The story of my life as a young child.

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Events that happen as a young child create a strong impression in life. If you have survived such things at a very early age nothing can beat you in the years to come. It shows incomparable courage...
I cannot comment on the write up...it's as good as life that's penned...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Years are just words to a greater message. and as they go y we must write what word will fit the picture.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Many cab relate to your words. Take courage, you're not alone.

Posted 8 Years Ago


A good timeline. As awful as it is, it seems a good majority of people would be able to relate this this. Home life can and is usually hard, especially when you are in a family who doesn't understand how to raise a child. The ones that survive are usually met with depression... but on the other side, such intelligence and deep thought. I've never resented the way I was treated as a child, because it shaped me to be who I am today...l I wouldn't change that for the world. No matter what happens, there's always an upside :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Taz

8 Years Ago

Thank you I appriciate the kind words.
This is very plain but very good and well spoken as a suicide survivor I love it and also dwell on it from time to time. I like it; it's a growing vine in the heart and soul and very emotional. Good show, very good but add more depth next time and more feeling in the reading. Thank you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Taz

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the advice.
Richard simpson

8 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Critique: The word "plain" summarizes the technique used in this piece - and I feel that this is the best choice of technique to describe such deep pain. Plain in a way that the less polished words are rougher - just the right tone.

Others: Add another seven or eight to your numbers and you'll get something similar to my story. The exact content should be quite different, but the steps were almost identical...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Taz

8 Years Ago

I want to keep it my own from one to ten because from one to ten is when everything happned.
The Exiled Wolf

8 Years Ago

Changing the numbers would covert yours to me mine, but there's nothing wrong with your numbers - do.. read more
Oh, geez.
I'm here for you if you need to talk that out; meaningful, short and ot the point. Like a razor's edge.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Haan a different but an adventurous life...accept those and you will find inner peace..:)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on April 3, 2017
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Taz
Taz

Alberta, Canada



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