The Evil

Writing it to get it out of my mind.

Here he comes, behind me now,
I try to hide, I huddle down,
To get away from him but how?
I curl up, my head I bow,
But it's too late, cause I am found,
By Evil
He lifts me up, with his huge hands,
He breaks my will now, as he lands,
The pain inside me, nothing new,
It's not the first time, yes it's true,
No one can help me, I am through,
As I am hurt by,
The Evil.

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

This was ...i am dumbfounded.. i can't tell its beautiful or amazing cause i am still caught up with the strong emotion of the poem. The pain , the fright , the tearing of soul and the character consumed in pain and its agony is making it feel alive , as if i am the character. Kudos to you. You must have gone through something tough and i hope the weight is lifted off your chest. Keep smiling and stay strong. You are a prolific writer. All the best dear. I am just unable to stop myself from continuing the review. hahaha...

[Taz]

lol thank you!

[mercy party]

such a dark lurking feeling you created in this poem. stayed on point, created suspense, very good!

[Taz]

Thank you.

[The Exiled Wolf]

When I read this piece, I can picture an angel being pursued by a devilish figure, and finally gets contaminated. The helpless, guilt and shame are naturally flowing between the lines. I hope that after writing this, the burden from these emotions is reduced. I believe that writing is a panacea to accumulation of toxic emotions. In terms of rhyming and structure, this piece is a good one. Keep writing!

[Taz]

Thank you, I will.

[Sofia]

The poem was amazing! I like your poems very much. You write everything from the depth of your heart and it touches your readers including me. And yeah, you seem courageous even after undergoing such pain. Yet again, a good job!

[Taz]

Thank you very much.

[Sofia]

My pleasure :)

[Hebe]

Your words have such an impact, the emotion came right through .....you made me feel sadness, anger and distain ! Your courage is amazing, keep writing it helps...

[Taz]

Help it does, if I didn't write then I would be in alot more pain then I could handle, thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Surya]

Quite smooth flow, honesty shown well, letting your emotions flow as words all in all a good one...:)

[Taz]

Thank You.

[...Relic...]

Awesome poem. It is smooth, has rhymes and flows well throughout.

That's the machanics of it.

With that said, I don't want to ignore the feeling and the meaning of the poem. I can feel a haunting presence behind your words as though you have been going through this a long time. Almost as though you could explode without pointing out what you go through. I commend you for that. Writing helps bring out the demons into the light.

Keep writing if it helps.

Relic.

[Taz]

You have basically hit it spot on. Thanks for reading.

[...Relic...]

My pleasure. :)