The Evil

Writing it to get it out of my mind.

Here he comes, behind me now,
I try to hide, I huddle down,
To get away from him but how?
I curl up, my head I bow,
But it's too late, cause I am found,
By Evil
He lifts me up, with his huge hands,
He breaks my will now, as he lands,
The pain inside me, nothing new,
It's not the first time, yes it's true,
No one can help me, I am through,
As I am hurt by,
The Evil.

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

This was ...i am dumbfounded.. i can't tell its beautiful or amazing cause i am still caught up with the strong emotion of the poem. The pain , the fright , the tearing of soul and the character consumed in pain and its agony is making it feel alive , as if i am the character. Kudos to you. You must have gone through something tough and i hope the weight is lifted off your chest. Keep smiling and stay strong. You are a prolific writer. All the best dear. I am just unable to stop myself from continuing the review. hahaha...

[Taz]

lol thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right my friend. Can't stop evil. Your words honest and direct. I liked them. Thank you Taz for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Broken Hearts]

This is such a beautiful piece containing a great amount of emotion. My absolute favorite line has to be: "It's not the first time, yes it's true, no one can help me, I am through". I would love to see more pieces like this! Stay strong!

[Taz]

Thank you.

[Ankit Miglani]

"It's not the first time , yes it's true. No one can help me , i am through ." The rhythm with the choiced words actually made me think of all the times when i was knocked down , i still do but the hope is stronger than the evil , everytime it has proved. Thank you for this piece. Don't hide , do fight just as you did with such a beautiful piece of writing.

[Taz]

Thank you so much, I appriciate it.

[MaryKC]

Please tell me if I am wrong, I will apologize, but it seems to me that at least one person on here has completely missed what this poem was about. I respect you for writing and sharing this, this takes guts. The comment "Wow, nice to hear you got found" seems highly inappropriate to me. I'm kind of outspoken though and speak up when I think someone has said something they shouldn't have. Perhaps a language barrier? not sure.

[Taz]

To be honest I think there was a complete misunderstanding of the whole poem though I am not sure.

[MaryKC]

It did kind of seem that way. Maybe I was a little harsh, LOL.

[Taz]

IDK LOL I really dunno

[Larayasha DiAlma]

Everyone has, at least once in their life, experienced a kind of evil inside of them. It just needs a stronger person to overcome their demons.

[B]

Evil has this distinct effect on the mind and body
Kills all
And you can feel it coming from a million miles

Good job !!!

[MarkAndTheOcean]

Pretty good. Had a good, consistent tone all throughout and a bitter end.
Keep it up!

[Taz]

Thank you.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wonderfully penned!
I see here great potential and structure.
I seriously admire rhyming poems.
Sometimes evil gets a control over us and its almost difficult to escape it.
Well done! Keep going!:)

[Taz]

Thank you, this was built from a memory.