This is simple elegance and poetically penned. The brevity of the piece captures perfectly magnitude of one of life's miracles, I also love that you drew the music analogy out, underlying the piece. The best part of me is a momma to a wee man, so this is deeply felt! Well done. Regards Ray
This is a delighting piece. A simple story, a simple poem and a simple thought are woven into a piece of lovely artwork. Just one thing - some commas can be removed to make the rhythm smoother!
Thank you for the advice but I put them there to seperate each syllable properly.
7 Years Ago
Lol that's totally fine:) I agree that they are good indicators for intentional pauses when reading .. read moreLol that's totally fine:) I agree that they are good indicators for intentional pauses when reading this out loud!
This is simple elegance and poetically penned. The brevity of the piece captures perfectly magnitude of one of life's miracles, I also love that you drew the music analogy out, underlying the piece. The best part of me is a momma to a wee man, so this is deeply felt! Well done. Regards Ray
I love it. It brings the mildest nostalgia with the thought put into the poem, and it also gives me a sense of security and rememberance. Well done! ^^
I like to write poems that spontaniously generate in my mind. I am 17 and I am a girl who is in high school so my poems will not be amazing but I do my best.I love my spanish and ASL,I also love basic.. more..