She

For a kindly heart

A time ago, 

I was alone,

 With no one there, 

me on my own,

 There was a girl 

who came to me,

 Twenty years only was she,

 Then she showed me,

 helped me see, 

 The happy person I could be. 

 I was unhappy hurt and sad, 

 Everything I felt was bad, 

 She did take me, under her wing, 

 She helped me breath,

 she helped me sing, 

 And I am certain of one thing, 

 she is most without a doubt,

 Beautiful inside and out.

Author's Note

This is a poem I made about the light of my life and best friend to ease the depression.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem a lot. We do need kind people near.
"And I am certain of one thing,
she is most without a doubt,
Beautiful inside and out."
I liked the lines above. Thank you Taz for sharing the amazing and hopeful poetry.
Coyote

[APOORVA]

A time ago, I was alone,
With no one there, me on my own,
MORE THAN YOU BEING ALONE, THESE LINES SHOW THAT YOU'RE A POWERFUL MIND. GREAT START.


She helped me breath, she helped me sing, YOUR CONNECTION WITH THAT GIRL IS CLEARLY REFLECTING BY YOUR WORDS, IT'S A STORY IN THE FORM OF POETRY. I APPRECIATE YOUR WAY OF WRITING.
JUST ONE SUGGESTION, I'D LOVE TO READ IT AS AN ELABORATED STORY, BECAUSE IT SEEMS A REALLY INTERESTING ONE.


she is most without a doubt,
Beautiful inside and out.
TERRIFIC END, SHORT, PRECISE AND ON THE MARK. VERY WELL WRITTEN. KEEP UP

[RuseInex]

Beautiful, fix breath to breathe,

[A.L.]

The power one person can have over another. I'm glad her's was a positive one. :)

[Taz]

I know all about control and power and she was the best thing that has happned to me in a long time.

[A.L.]

That's fantastic Taz

[Taz]

Thank You.

[mercy party]

I really like your phrasing style and it was genuinly from the heart. Great poem!

[Taz]

Thank you very much.

[aLittlePain]

Though simply stated this speaks volumes to the bonds of affection of true friendship. I think we need reminders like this in our lives often, whether you're 16, 26 or 66. You capture this well. Regards Ray

[Taz]

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Dits]

Good efforts ....A simple poem with a consistent rhyme scheme 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Very simple and sweet write. How kind of that friend who helped you. This poem has good rhyme. I liked it.