I love the message of this piece as well as the analogies you used to convey it. I've always believed that everyone has beauty inside them, and no matter how dire the circumstance, it's always present, maybe less noticeable, but always present. I think your poem is very inspirational and a good reminder that there's always someone who shares our pain. Thank you for sharing.
- William Liston
PS: In line 10, "thats" needs to be "that's" (with the apostrophe). Also, put a space after the comma in "kept,Behind"
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you for the corrections I will fix it and I am happy you liked the message.
I love the message of this piece as well as the analogies you used to convey it. I've always believed that everyone has beauty inside them, and no matter how dire the circumstance, it's always present, maybe less noticeable, but always present. I think your poem is very inspirational and a good reminder that there's always someone who shares our pain. Thank you for sharing.
- William Liston
PS: In line 10, "thats" needs to be "that's" (with the apostrophe). Also, put a space after the comma in "kept,Behind"
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you for the corrections I will fix it and I am happy you liked the message.
I have gone through a couple of writings of yours. And I see that there is an intriguing depth in them. For the age of 16, if your thoughts can be so deep, it is a MUST for you to let your energies in the right direction. You write very nicely and never stop writing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you very much I do have alot of things that come into my mind and I just write them down.
Love this poems flow. I am obsessed with poems that flow well and you did a great job. I also was just telling myself this last night. Your never alone. Keep writing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind review I am very grateful for it.
I like to write poems that spontaniously generate in my mind. I am 17 and I am a girl who is in high school so my poems will not be amazing but I do my best.I love my spanish and ASL,I also love basic.. more..